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the tunnel of black
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the tunnel of black |
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bOoGaSuGa Member
since 2001-08-03
Posts 54 |
what is this paranoya in the back of my head dealing with these thoughts i need a place to rest im in this dark place looking for the light and i see nothing but black trapped between the walls theres no escaping no way out nowhere to go getting scared im all alone how will i get out? maybe i wont i sit in this darkness crying wanting.... needing...... well that was weird i dunno where that came from lol [This message has been edited by bOoGaSuGa (edited 08-03-2001).] |
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chasing rain Senior Member
since 2001-05-15
Posts 737Canada |
Hmmm...nice flow. Quite dark...yet lacking something. You have some good imagery, and your ending is almost fearful...a good mood to match. Good work! -Leah Va pensiero sull' ali dorate... |
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bOoGaSuGa Member
since 2001-08-03
Posts 54 |
tanks :-D |
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bOoGaSuGa Member
since 2001-08-03
Posts 54 |
thanks i mean lol sorry im not the best at typing |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Very well done here. It was kind of dark and I thought you did a fine job on this.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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punkrockerrobin
since 2001-05-15
Posts 1180Sparks, NV |
you evil boy you lol! well *achem* i know the truth! hahahahaha no you didn't get me in trouble cus he closed it bfore he could read it. love ya! robin i don't give up without a fight so boys beware! |
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bOoGaSuGa Member
since 2001-08-03
Posts 54 |
he? LOL thanks dopey  robin who is this he character and y arent you talking on msn?  |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
VERY nicely done! I really enjoyed this one.. It sounds like you're going through a rough time? *hug* I'm here if you need someone to talk to Keep sharing all your work.--Marie You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning. |
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bOoGaSuGa Member
since 2001-08-03
Posts 54 |
nope marie just like dark poems  lol [This message has been edited by bOoGaSuGa (edited 08-04-2001).] |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
Man, I've been there before. Loved the last stanza. Nice write.  |
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