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Thinking 'Bout You
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Thinking 'Bout You |
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Shygirl82 Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 245Ilinois |
***I recently realized that I may have feelings for one of my guy friends...I am not sure where its going..but I am having fun finding out!! This is not the best..but I had to write something about him*** You held me When I couldn’t stop crying You listened Through all of his lying You were my friend Never anything more Now you got me thinking about you Like I have never thought of you before You told me Seeing my smile just makes your day My usual thoughts of HIM Slowly began to fade They were replaced of thoughts of you The way you worry about me The way you can always make me laugh I began to wonder could these feelings be true? I begin to detect The sparkle in your eyes The warmth of your hand The way that when you appeared Butterflies would emerge in my stomach You gently kissed me Just on the cheek Now I am even more confused Did you do it because you like me? Or was it just a simple goodnight? You gazed in my eyes Gently squeezed my hand You turned around Calmly called out Until next time! One day at a time Sounds like a perfect idea Taking it slowly Maybe if I do it right You might end up being mine Smile!! You never know who may be falling in love with it... [This message has been edited by Shygirl82 (edited 08-03-2001).] |
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branden726 
since 2000-09-25
Posts 607Bay City, MI |
This was good, But ya know u did kinda stop the rhyme a couple of times u started in one line and ended the next it would have been better if u carried it on, it was a good poem and i liked this one. All you other poets beware my true feelings and poetry are about to flare! |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
i totally liked the way you expressed yourself in this one...VERY well said...great job,Nikki. "if i die before i wake...i pray the Lord my soul to take" - when thugs cry- |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I thought this was nicely written. Good luck with the guy.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Angelwings Member
since 1999-08-27
Posts 222IL, USA |
Great poem. I think you should go for it, but take it slow whatever is going to make you happy. I hope you get whatever your heart desires. And (if his friend is single, I get what i desire too j/k!!!) anyway great poem to go with a great girl. Chez *that what does not kill us makes us stronger!* |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Wow... I used to feel this way about a friend of mine. Unfortunately, things didn't turn out well as of lately. But good luck with this situation, I hope things work out better for you than they did with me  He sounds like a great guy...--Marie You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning. |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
this was well done. Friends make the best companions. Best of luck with you 2. |
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allie Member
since 2001-07-09
Posts 218Australia |
I agree with the take it slow bit.. And i always love a good love poem... I'm a major sucker for them! lol... especially well written ones and i really liked this one infact it seemed like a fairytale post... and you've made it seem so easy to take it slow... But i've tried that and it makes me look up to you that you can handle it... im also a sucker for rushing into things~! lol... but i wish you luck with this guy... Sounds like he likes you!! ALLIE |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Aww this poem was so cute....i have to admit i love the feelings of butterflies in your stomach when you like someone and stuff...its such an amazing and irreplacable feeling... |
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