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my trusty lil steed lol
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my trusty lil steed lol |
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bOoGaSuGa Member
since 2001-08-03
Posts 54 |
inside the metal doors leaves a key to the amaze because its speed and good looks will put you in a daze it usually has 6 windows it is made out of metal and the best part is you dont have to petal it takes you places real fast no blading, biking, or walking the engine is quite quiet so you can hear the person talking this thing is my pride and joy it sure will take me far because see the thing im talking about is my good old fashioned car well that was fun lol [This message has been edited by bOoGaSuGa (edited 08-03-2001).] |
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chasing rain Senior Member
since 2001-05-15
Posts 737Canada |
Yes, yes it was fun.  You did well on this one, although sometimes I felt that you were a little desperate on rhymes (second stanza...petal thing...although i think it's spelled pedal...i'm being picky again...) I also felt the flow was a little rocky, but no matter... I hope to see more from you! Keep writing! -Leah Va pensiero sull' ali dorate... |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I thought you did nicely here! I liked it.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
HeHe- Very charming lil write here. I liked it. |
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bOoGaSuGa Member
since 2001-08-03
Posts 54 |
thanks |
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bOoGaSuGa Member
since 2001-08-03
Posts 54 |
id like to congratulate myself on 30 posts!!!! LOL |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Congrats for 30 posts!  I really like this one Nice work. It was fun A good read.--Marie You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning. |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Well it says 53 there, so YAY FOR YOUR 53 POSTS!! lol This was very cute. Cars are nice little things, aren't they?  ~AF~ "Why not light the candle in the dark tunnel while we head for the light at the end?" - Anonymous Albert to anonymousfemale |
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