Dark Materials #2: Dreamless Tales

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chasing rain
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since 2001-05-15

Posts 737
Canada

0 posted 2001-08-01 03:37 PM

Golden dreams and silver seams
Bind the sky above.
Shining lights and snow-capped heights
Pierce this world of love.

Captured hearts and poisoned darts
Fills the empty air.
Severed leaves and dirty sleeves
Are thrown about with care.

Wrinkled hands and broken lands
Face the world in fear.
Tinted skies and untold lies
Fill my open ears.

Captured wings and vanquished kings
Leads the souless land.
Blazing flame and barren names
Burns the spirit's hand.

Shattered space and tattered lace
Clothe the worn and void.
Spattered stars and windy scars
Finds this world destroyed.

Crimson sheets and bloody cheeks
Smoke-filled lives transcend.
Tell the tales when all else fails
And tell it to the end.

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MUAHA! Another one...me thinks I'm writing a tad too much...hehe.

-Leah

Va pensiero sull' ali dorate...

[This message has been edited by chasing rain (edited 08-01-2001).]

thedragonthomas
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since 2001-07-30

Posts 15

1 posted 2001-08-01 04:13 PM

wow, tihs was really really good! i like reading your stuff, it seems like what poetry should be the way it totally flows! awsome stuff.

Ina
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since 2000-10-09

Posts 1236
Quebec, Canada

2 posted 2001-08-01 05:00 PM

This was awesome, had a great flow it worked to a beat in my head. keep this series up!

Regina

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

3 posted 2001-08-02 01:07 AM

awesome...i loved this piece...as it seemed magical in way...to me.

"if i die before i wake...i pray the Lord my soul to take" - when thugs cry-

Linc

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since 2001-03-07

Posts 552
The Backstreet Boy

4 posted 2001-08-02 09:24 AM

Hey,

      Now this is what I like!
      Not a face in sight!

      The poem was great
      Leaves you in a thinking state

      As I walk out the door
      I have not, much more

      Not much left to say
      Only good day

I am sorry about the poem

This is really good I like it alot and it will also grace the tops of my library. Unitl your next masterpeice

                          -- Linc

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[This message has been edited by Linc (edited 08-02-2001).]

Low Man's Lyric
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since 2001-04-03

Posts 236
In a dream

5 posted 2001-08-02 10:50 AM

Wow, this flowed very smoothly and I liked the format. This is definatly going into my library!

"Right now I'm having amnesia and deja vu at the same time. I think I've forgotten this before."
~Steven Wright

mistic
Member

since 2001-05-06

Posts 233
Idaho, U.S.A.

6 posted 2001-08-02 02:49 PM

this was an awesome piece, i loved the flow and the imagery

zarina
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since 2001-05-19

Posts 180

7 posted 2001-08-02 03:15 PM

*waw*

I am always myself. Isn't that enough for you?

keoni
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since 2000-10-16

Posts 850
Up in the mountains in the NFC

8 posted 2001-08-02 05:27 PM

This is dope! I liked this one alot. Extremely impressive. It's going in my library.
Jon

"Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine
"Only God can judge me" Tupac Shakur

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

9 posted 2001-08-03 06:28 PM

Keoni said the poem was me. I agree, it was so me.
I liked it a lot!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

chasing rain
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since 2001-05-15

Posts 737
Canada

10 posted 2001-08-03 06:32 PM

lol. Riiight...

Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

11 posted 2001-08-04 07:06 PM

LOL @ Dopes.

This poem ROCKED, Leah! It was awesome! The internal rhyme scheme you had going really added to the flow, and turned out beautifully. Nicely done! I really enjoyed this one. I am going to LOVE this series!

--Marie

You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning.

anonymousfemale
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

12 posted 2001-08-06 02:40 AM

oh my goodness, leah...This is beyond words! You have come out of nowhere with these pieces and totally blown me out of the water. Go you! lol

The flow in this kicked some major butt the rhyme scheme was very well done.
To the library it goes!

~AF~

"Why not light the candle in the dark tunnel while we head for the light at the end?" - Anonymous Albert to anonymousfemale

Terryloveiris_85
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since 2001-04-23

Posts 61
The middle of nowhere

13 posted 2001-08-06 10:48 AM

wonderful......just wonderful....
~iris

i'd give eternity to be by your side-goo goo dolls/City of Angels soundtrack

goodness is found in the heart, not the money.

[This message has been edited by Terryloveiris_85 (edited 08-06-2001).]

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