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luckyducky_505
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since 2001-04-29

Posts 53
Kentucky, USA

0 posted 2001-08-03 12:20 PM

I apoligize my friend,
I let my broken heart unbend.
I let you have my heart to hold,
I was weak and you were bold.

We once were one but now we're not,
I asked you once but I forgot.
Did we love or did we not,
Was it over because we fought?

I cherished everything we had,
But somehow we let it turn bad.
I dreamed and hoped for you not to leave,
I guess the dream weaver forgot to weave.
Note:

I wrote this because of what I was going through. I hope everybody in this situation has a better outcome then I did.

© Copyright 2001 Tiffany L. McDonald - All Rights Reserved

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

1 posted 2001-08-03 03:57 AM

Sounds like you went through something rough. I liked the poem and I hope things do get better for you.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

Shygirl82
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since 2001-02-19

Posts 245
Ilinois

2 posted 2001-08-03 04:09 AM

I am feelin ya on this one...hope things are better now. Great write
~Nikki~

Smile!! You never know who may be falling in love with it...

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since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

3 posted 2001-08-04 05:24 PM

Wow.. this sounds like a very hard situation. I'm sorry that you went through this. *hug* Keep your head up. Things'll get better

As for the poem, I really liked the rhyme scheme. Very well done.
I hope you feel better.

--Marie

You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning.

Spice
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since 2001-04-13

Posts 1266
Resting in my cardboard box.

4 posted 2001-08-04 10:57 PM

I agree w/ Marie. The rhyme scheme was odne well. The situation sucks. I've felt that. Horrible. the last line was great! I liked this alot.

luckyducky_505
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since 2001-04-29

Posts 53
Kentucky, USA

5 posted 2001-08-05 04:31 PM

THANKS EVERYBODY FOR THE REPLIES!!!

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