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Kral New Member
since 2001-07-27
Posts 1Pennsylvania |
Sometimes I wonder who I am or what I want to be in this world of bitter anguish a crazy world indeed who am I? where will I ever go? these questions fill my head the answers...? well, who only knows. I search for all the answers but they, i cannot find I wish to be led... to the place with all the answers. a place where I can stand without fear! a place where i can gander! to see all that I want to see knowledge running wild absorbtion of these things... ...no longer being a child. |
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Linc
since 2001-03-07
Posts 552The Backstreet Boy |
**WELCOME TO PASSIONS KRAL!** Hey, This poem is really good. I had no idea you were such a superb poet. Well since I am talking to you OTM (on the mud) thats all I have to say. Oh and check your email  Keep this masterful work up and until your next poem-- Linc I wanted first reply so  "Blood Moon" Host: Lark.crodo.com Port:1313 [This message has been edited by Linc (edited 07-27-2001).] |
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JBaker515
since 2001-02-28
Posts 458Dartmouth College |
 WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!! Kral, this was a solid first post. You are going to love it here at PIP, we are a very large family of poets. Hope you enjoy your self here Kral!! Great job. Hope to see more posts and replys! THanks Jeff /Moderator ~Jeff~ |
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chasing rain Senior Member
since 2001-05-15
Posts 737Canada |
Wow, congrats on a wonderful first post, and welcome to PIP! Muahaha. I mean... I felt that this piece had a darker side to it, mysterious almost. Nice and deep... I especially liked the ending. It made me think a bit. Anyways, I hope you enjoy it here, and feel free to get to know other poets!  -Leah Va pensiero sull' ali dorate... |
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knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
darn you ALL! i wanted to be first.  but newayz....KRAL!!! wooo i like it. hah didnt know u could write *poke*:p glad we got u here in pip even tho ur a bit umm old *cough* :p im jkin dont slay me! so great first post. cant wait for more! and.. WELCOME TO PASSIONS tiff  this is gana btw I am Gaudior the shadow cast of valour to cloak our vision the remants of days long past lay waking in the twilight [This message has been edited by knightlyshadows (edited 07-27-2001).] |
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Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
This was a wonderful first post. I cant wait to see more of your works. Linc, what is on the mud supposed to mean?? Anyway, check your email for a special surprise!! HeavensTears ~ Moderator [This message has been edited by Heavens Tears (edited 07-27-2001).] |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
So is this the Immortal Kral visiting us children in the Teen #5 forum? I'm flattered. Not a bad poem, mister immortal. The theme I found to be a very personal one to you, I get the impression that this poem was written as an expression of feeling during a time of contemplation. The scattered rhyme was charming throughout, it compelled me to read on. The flow was alright, but you might want to work on your vocab and wording a bit more. I personally found that to be a bit plain. The thoughts in here are solid and good, as is the casual rhyme, but the wordings of many sentences could do with a bit of work to make them less mundane and a bit more standout. Nice to see you posting in Passions in Poetry, mister immortal. As always, Allan of Riverwood Blood Moon |
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Linc
since 2001-03-07
Posts 552The Backstreet Boy |
Okay 2 things One how can you send him an email when he didn't give an give out his addy? Two *gasp* ALLAN! you you *crys* stole my sig. hehe -- Linc "Blood Moon" |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
 Welcome to PIP...and Teen #5 A wonderful first post. My fav lines: "these questions fill my head the answers...? well, who only knows. I search for all the answers but they, i cannot find" I liked the pauses and stuff you have going here. The last line of the poem was wonderful as well. I enjoyed the read and I'll be looking for more. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Welcome to Passions. I enjoyed this first post. Found it to be quite deep and profound. Well done here Kral. I hope to see you participate more in the future.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Welcome to Passions in Poetry! Well, well, well.. we have a fellow mudder in here now? I enjoyed this poem.. very nicely done. A powerful subject, and one that I think many poeople could connect with. Nicely done!--Marie You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning. |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Kral Kral oh my goodness its Kral!!! (*cough* this is Scia *cough*) Time to suck up...hmm...I enjoyed this poem. Being a kid is kinda fun, like they say..ignorance IS bliss... see you later, Mister Imm.  Speak softly and carry a beagle. |
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