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we need to talk |
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Allysa 
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden 
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We need to talk. there's some things I need to say. I don't understand you anymore. It's like you're a different person. Will you give me one more chance? So we can have a relationship? So we can try and see if we have anything, before we decide that we have nothing? I need you to listen. Don't say anything until I'm done. Don't blame me for anything, you know it's not my fault. I've struggled this past year, and when I needed you, you weren't there to help me. When I cried so hard I was shaking, and I needed you to listen to me, you weren't there at all. You didn't even know. Now I hear you're talking trash about me. I don't care because I know you don't mean it. You put me down all the time and as much as it bothers me I don't mind because I know it's just the way you are. A lot of people don't understand why I like you at all. After you dumped me for no good reason. They said it was cuz your friends didn't like me. Well, your friends all like me now. I worked on that. I don't let myself cry. I tell myself that's not what you want. I wonder if you would cry if I was gone. I want to ask you now. Is there anything between us? Are you going to give me a chance? Or are you going to just assume that you know everything and that we could never ever have anything. I think you should give me a chance. It's a wonder I even want to give you a chance still. After everything you've put me through, I should just go date your cousin. I know that would annoy you a lot though. In case you haven't realized, I'm listing all the things I need to tell you, all the stuff I want to say. But the words aren't coming out of my mouth. I guess I should start in the begining. We need to talk. Just a lil rant.  Someone once taught me that it doesn't matter what other people think of you as long as you like yourself. That's what I live by. |
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thedarkangel Member
since 2001-05-12
Posts 74~*~the cutest~*~ |
that's so cool.... i've been dumped before cuz a guys friends didn't like me and then they came up and sed they had nothin to do with it. great poem. rants are the best. laura ~*~ i tried taking life one day at a time... then several attacked me at once |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
I know it wasn't asked for- but can I PLEASE give my opinion on the situation? "Yes Jesa the Great, you may!" Why thankyou! HaHa Ok- I'm gonna quote you. "You put me down all the time and as much as it bothers me I don't mind because I know it's just the way you are." If YOU keep giving him that excuse.... "Oh Thats just (Is his name Justin?) Justin..." "Well, you know Justin..." "Thats Justin doing what he does best..." ETC ETC... it's not going to stop! There is no excuse for someone to talk trash about anyone. It's mean! And you don't deserve to be treated that way! No more, "Thats just the way you are." Stand p for yourself. Next.... "A lot of people don't understand why I like you at all. After you dumped me for no good reason. They said it was cuz your friends didn't like me." Okay- thats the LAMEST reason ever. If the guy cared about you, he wouldn't give a damn what his friends thought. You aren't there to impressive his friends- you are there for HIM. I know you REALLY like this guy and want it to work etc etc...But I say GO FOR THE COUSIN! If he treats you better, and you like him etc etc- you will end up being MUCH happier. And hell, perhaps Ex-o will figure out how bad he treated you and feel like crap forever and ever. HeHeHe (Thats always a plus) ANYWAY- In regards to the poem... I liked it alot. I thought you expressed yourself VERY well. A sucky situaion you got there. You guys SERIOUSLY do need to talk. Best of luck to you.  Oh, and I won't charge you for that advice- consider it a freebie. LMAO...I'm kidding. Thanks for the read, Deary. |
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thug-a-licious Junior Member
since 2000-08-08
Posts 27 |
wow this was really great! I guess i must have lived a shelterd life because i always thought i was the only one who had to put up with the crap like you're man is putting u through. Basically what i'm trying to say is i've been there , shoot i'm still there, unfortunatly i've been through it on and off for the past 3 years now. I still haven't been able to let go ! I know it's hard but maybe you should try for the cousin and get out while you can , before you put 3 years of your life into it like i have! But you're poem was really really great i can't wait to read more. Lexi |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
good work, but not your best. keep writing Allysa |
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chasing rain Senior Member
since 2001-05-15
Posts 737Canada |
This piece was good. Full of thought (even though it's just a rant) and emotion. Not your best, but good anyhow. -Leah Va pensiero sull' ali dorate... |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
Thanks ya all. Okay, about the putting me down thing. He does that to everyone and he doesn't mean it. He puts down his friends all the time, and I get the very least of it. It honestly doesn't bother me at all. Someone once taught me that it doesn't matter what other people think of you as long as you like yourself. That's what I live by. |
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Low Man's Lyric Member
since 2001-04-03
Posts 236In a dream |
I liked this one, I kind of know what your going through because my friend is the same way. Any way thanks for sharing. "Right now I'm having amnesia and deja vu at the same time. I think I've forgotten this before." |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
He puts down his friends? That's not the kind of friend i'd like, i'll tell you that. Well anyway i thought this was fine.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
I don't want to try and justify everything he does, just let me explain something. He makes fun of his friends and puts them down and crap like that, and they do that to him too. It's like there way of communicating, or something. If any of his friends talk about me badly in a non joking manor, he beats their butts. He jokes around and calls me a ho and stuff, and I don't mind cuz I joke around with him all the time like that, but one of his friends called me something along the lines of a "lazy little whore" and he beat his butt. Needless to say, Justin and that person are no longer friends. It might sound strange or something, but it's the way it is. He won't let anyone say anything mean about me and I won't let anyone say anything mean about him. Someone once taught me that it doesn't matter what other people think of you as long as you like yourself. That's what I live by. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Allysa.. I've read so many poems you've written about this guy. And in most, you said he treats you like crap. Yeah, yeah, girls like bad boys. Whatever.. Allysa, you deserve better! If he doesn't treat you the way you should be treated, then don't humor him anymore. You said he dumped you because his friends didn't like you? That's awful! He is all wrong for you. You deserve someone who will cherish you, and treat you like you're the only thing that's important to him in this world. That's what you deserve. Anywho, I really liked this poem. VERY good rant... please take what I said into consideration. Thanks for the read --Marie You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning. |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
Marie, you are soooo right! It just took me a while to figure it out. I still love him, I always will, but I'm gonna find me another man! Someone once taught me that it doesn't matter what other people think of you as long as you like yourself. That's what I live by. |
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