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The Dusty Road
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The Dusty Road |
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fozzyozzy Member
since 2001-03-15
Posts 336Lessburg Virginia 
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I am returning with the only thing I've successfully written in two weeks. This is about a really cool person I met recently, but the only problem is she lives about 2 hours away. Tell me what you think  ------------------------ The Dusty Road Skips along a dusty dirt road Bring footsteps and memories Back to my mindful load Was I alone among the clapping birds The dying trees? My girl, she has a house on this road A little farther past sullen horizon Somewhere on this road... Is her house painted red and cotton behind the current laison. I look down upon myself a bird's eye I can find myself staring back Into dust through to the sky. Were there any gifts given for you In my tattered baggage and soulful sack? I'm crossing paths with many a border Painted fences travelling beside me But no conversation is in order. They tell me with rots and molds That upwards the dusty road is a better place to be. My girl's home can sleep for the times I pause She can sleep in the plain trees Plain trees that scratch me with Autumn claws I can brush them away with ease I can blow the dust with ease And write her name with sand Only to alter the existence by my hand Legs carry no more I feel rushed by a breeze Blown by the green trees I can go no more Her house is too far away... I may to wish to send my heart on a gust Alas! To have one's love, taken in with the dust. "and Death i think is no paranthesis"-e.e. cummings |
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Talk about a master of couplets! Simply amazing ending. I truly love your poems. Awesome job!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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allie Member
since 2001-07-09
Posts 218Australia |
Really nice poem, ALSO nice to see an aussie here lol, im from sydney myself Nice read fozzyozzy, ALLIE |
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allie Member
since 2001-07-09
Posts 218Australia |
*allie looks embarressed* just realised you're from america WOOPS SORRY ALLIE |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
This poem is awesome... it really shows your feelings for this person. Looks like somebody's falling! I really liked the imagery in this whole piece. The wording is very professional, and adds to be descriptions... VERY nice work here, Foz! I REALLY enjoyed this one. --Marie You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
i liked this one...format was well written...enjoyed. "if i die before i wake...i pray the Lord my soul to take" - when thugs cry- |
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Shygirl82 Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 245Ilinois |
This was great! It flowed very well and and the format fit perfectly...excellent piece. ~Nikki~ It takes only a minute to like someone, a hour to love someone, but a lifetime to forget them. |
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