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Kevin

Senior Member

since 1999-11-02

Posts 729
Torrington, Ct, Usa

0 posted 2001-07-25 03:46 PM

Self esteem receding
To the depths it was before
Cannot stop the bleeding
Watch it pool onto the floor
Caught myself red handed
Staring off into the black
My Surfaces are sanded
But inside I bend and crack

Senses dull and falling
Sitting in a numbing pain
In the distance something’s calling
But it calls to me in vain
My spirit’s disconnected
Segregated by self bounds
In the end it was expected
When I’m lost I feel I’m found

DarkenedShadow
Member

since 2001-07-23

Posts 114
Kansas

1 posted 2001-07-25 03:48 PM

Ya I went through that little ordeal abouta month ago, and who better to express it for all of us but you. A fine piece of work at that,thought was a must for this one... /Nick/

TopGunLauren
Senior Member

since 2000-08-02

Posts 718
California

2 posted 2001-07-25 04:00 PM

I can totally relate to what your saying in your poem I really like it.Keep up the awsome work!
Lauren

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

3 posted 2001-07-26 02:32 AM

I really like this one Kevin! Awesome flow and ryhme. You are truly a wonderful poet.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

Spice
Senior Member

since 2001-04-13

Posts 1266
Resting in my cardboard box.

4 posted 2001-07-26 02:42 AM

I agree w/ Dopes. This had an excellent flow/rhyme to it. I totally enjoyed it. A wonderful write her. My fav of yours so far.

Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

5 posted 2001-07-30 11:23 PM

I loved this poem.. the last line really had an impact on me. That made the whole poem... I especially enjoyed the first stanza.. had an eerie flow to it. Like Dopes and Jesa said, the flow was right on. The poem rocked! Nice job!

--Marie

You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning.

anonymous albert ?

Member Elite

since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

6 posted 2001-08-01 02:48 AM

...this was awesome...i REALLY liked this one...great job!

[This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 08-01-2001).]

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