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Things You'll Never Know |
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StellarChica Member
since 2002-07-06
Posts 207floating down a river... |
Did you know that I stay up late waiting for you? This difference in time zones is difficult, I know, But can't I just get a minute or so of you in before bed. Did you know that just about everything reminds me of you? Even the sheets on my bed make me think of you, Not to mention that loose piece of thread. Did you know that these dreams of you get better every night? But, I always wake up right at the best part, If only I could stay asleep to find out how it ends. Did you know that I miss you? Then again, I never actually had you in the first place, I guess that's just how far this feeling has gone beyond friends. Did you know that I love you? Wait, I don't even know that, This is the part where confusion sets in. *~erin~* [This message has been edited by StellarChica (09-09-2002 07:27 PM).] |
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Allysa 
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
This was actually a lot better than I was honestly expecting it to be. You may want to consider a better title, one that might grasp the reader's attention better than simply calling it "something..." Just a thought though... ich bin schwul, ich bin jüdisch und ein Kommunist dazu, Ich bin schwarz und behindert, doch genauso Mensch wie du ~Wizo |
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devinechild22 Senior Member
since 2002-08-28
Posts 571 |
that was an awesome poem! I agree that u should jazz up the title. if people knew how good this was they would be coming from every where to read this! great poem! allison |
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StellarChica Member
since 2002-07-06
Posts 207floating down a river... |
Yeah the title is not great but I can't think of an actual title..hmm..any ideas? |
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