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devinechild22
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since 2002-08-28

Posts 571

0 posted 2002-09-06 10:58 PM

bittersweet
she walks uptsairs to her room
crying in her bittersweet gloom
only 13 but thinks she is in love
in this game of war, love, push and shove
she wants him to know
that inside her heart glows
for him
but he`ll never know
no he won`t ever know
cause she holds it inside
until she cries
but he will never know
no he`ll never know
cause in this world of bittersweet perfection
a young girl cannot suvive
without canfusion in hate and love
in this bittersweet game of war,love,push and shove

devinechild22
Senior Member

since 2002-08-28

Posts 571

1 posted 2002-09-06 11:01 PM

i hope you guys like this one. i had a hard time writin it. i don`t think i`m a very good poet but i love to write and i`m very persistant so i don`t give up easily. i guess that`s what a struggling poet needs,drive. thanks for your support on my first poem! thanks all.

allison

HopelessRomanticGuy
Member

since 2001-08-17

Posts 495
LI, New York

2 posted 2002-09-06 11:03 PM

Aww.. such a sad poem, about an all to common sittuation. We all fall in love sooner or later, love has no age limit. Well, I liked the poem, you write well!

-Rich

After Love comes Pain, then Love, Then Pain, then Love, then Pain..... does anyone else see a pattern here? Oh well, can't say it's not worth it.

PoeticGoddessOfDepression
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since 2002-07-02

Posts 439
I am everywhere

3 posted 2002-09-06 11:04 PM

"cause in this world of bittersweet perfection
a young girl cannot suvive"

heh.. I like this.
Keep 'em comin!

~Sara

"I never thought it's ever come to
-this-
in fact was never what you wanted from me, or how you meant it to be."

Riley

Senior Member

since 2002-07-18

Posts 1038
in the pouring rain

4 posted 2002-09-07 01:07 PM

I am going through the same thing right now as we speak. But i get to see him today.Yippee! Loved it.

Ri

~* Someday, I will conquer it and then I will be free *~

SunShine913

Member

since 2001-08-19

Posts 211
Italy but from NC

5 posted 2002-09-07 02:19 PM

and you say your not a poet would you like to tell me why you say that?>>>???

Well either way i really this poem .. although sad i liked it .. keepem coming i would like to read more~!

*!~!* Andrea *!~!*
soon to be mother

Spine Grinder
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since 2000-10-28

Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...

6 posted 2002-09-08 10:57 AM

i liked this. keep writing.

~Ur feelings never change, u just learn 2 hide them~

Kevin

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since 1999-11-02

Posts 729
Torrington, Ct, Usa

7 posted 2002-09-09 10:30 PM

Drive and confidence

lilmissbabyteddybear
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since 2003-03-16

Posts 17
Abilene, Texas

8 posted 2003-03-17 09:44 PM

IT was a very good poem. It is sad though, how he will never know. I like it very much. Jenny

>>*:):(~+~+~JeNnYgOoD~+~+~:(:)*<<
~*~*~*~lilmissbabyteddybear~*~*~*~

Barbara
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since 2003-01-24

Posts 32

9 posted 2003-04-07 12:49 PM

wow.... I really like this poem. I felt just like this when I was 13

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