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Your Doll
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Your Doll |
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EleanorMoonbaby Member
since 2002-09-02
Posts 202England, UK 
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I'm your toy, aren't I. A slightly uglier version of Barbie, a frog amongst swans. Now I'm holding my plastic, imperfect arms out, saying "Please play with me. I'm still usefull, my limbs have yet to be torn off by someone else; There's no biro scribble on my face Just a slight mistake on the production line". Sometimes it works, and you remember how I was fun to play with. We become inseparable, I'm like that old teddy you can't throw away. Then a new version comes out. Brand new Girlfriend-dolly, with new hair, clothes and accessories, complete with perfect, vacant smile. Then I go back to the toy box to gather dust until you remember me again. But I'm a faithful toy, so I stay put. In the beginning, the Universe was made. This has angered a lot of people and has been widely regarded as a bad move- Douglas Adams |
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mistic Member
since 2001-05-06
Posts 233Idaho, U.S.A. |
This is a really interesting and a really good piece. I have kind of mixed feelings about this though I'm not sure what the feelings are... but I must like this quite a bit because it's going into my library. nice job. |
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Savage Quiescence Member
since 2002-07-29
Posts 326Wandering |
This is a unique piece. The metaphor was good, it was very appropriate for the topic. A nice sense of hopeful, naive devotion. Smiles ~Sky "Whatever life brings, I've been through everything, but now I'm on my knees again" -Creed |
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Echo Junior Member
since 2003-02-20
Posts 14the abyss |
aww. your poem reminds me of so many of my favorite toys, lying on my bed and dresser, always waitin. |
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