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ShadyMakaveli
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since 2002-08-21
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0 posted 2002-08-26 05:58 PM


No longer is your relationship pure
Unfortunatly there is no cure
What's done is done, no goin back
Shouldn't have been so quick to hit the sack
Left with a relationship that's tainted
A new image that's permanently painted
A step in a mature direction, was it beneficial
Will it affect our relationship and create something artificial
Time has passed, sit and reflect
Take your thoughts and recollect
Since that night nothings been the same
Our relationship has become nothing more than a game
You probably think, your pretty clever
Not in it for love, just pleasure
Too immature to have made that decision
To fix our mistakes is our new mission
It will take some work and wishing
If only we stuck to just kissing


That's my new poem i just wrote, i am looking for some feedback, so if anyone's got anything to say please let me know, thanx to all who read this.

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Match
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since 2002-07-01
Posts 286
Canada Edmonton
1 posted 2002-08-26 06:03 PM


I liked this a lot and it pretty much is what my old relationship was like. Thnxs for the awsome read.

I cant see past all the pain and torture that goes on in the places we call,
home.
~Azi

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