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Smiles and Cries
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since 2002-08-23
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0 posted 2002-08-24 12:01 PM


When last did i laugh
without telling a lie?
When last did i hope
when not hoping to die?

When last did i feel
without feeling an ache?
When last did i love
when not fearing heartbreak?

When last did i think
without thinking of death?
When last did i dream
not of my final breath?

When last did i smile
Without wanting to cry?
When last did i live
when not wanting to die?

Have u ever Loved somebody so much it makes u cry? Have u ever needed something so bad u cant sleep at night? Have u ever tried to find the words but

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1 posted 2002-08-24 01:11 AM


wow i really like this one  great first post hope to see more. plz check your email for a special greeting.

you either like me for who i am or you don't like me at all

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2 posted 2002-08-24 11:27 AM


Welcome to the blue pages, Brittany. I hope you enjoy it here as much as we all do...This was a well-expressed poem, one (unfortunately) that I can relate to sometimes. I sincerely hope that you can experience the odd-numbered lines without the even-numbered ones soon. Hang in there.

  ~Carly

"Feelings are not supposed to be logical. Dangerous is the man who has rationalized his emotions."
  ~David Borenstein

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Beneath the northern stars
3 posted 2002-08-24 01:46 PM


Welcome, Brittany! (I like your screen name.) I'm sorry to hear that you are feeling this way. You expressed your feelings very well in this poem. I remember the times I felt this way too. Hang in there! Once again, welcome!

~Beth

You look inside my wild mind
never knowing what you'll find
still I want you all the time
yeah I do
'cause you get me
~Michelle Branch

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Standing In Silence...
4 posted 2002-08-25 06:43 PM


Wow, this was a great 1st post and i really liked this. awesum job. its goin in my library

~Ur feelings never change, u just learn 2 hide them~

Pollita
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since 2002-07-25
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the unknown realm of insanity
5 posted 2002-08-25 07:12 PM


HI!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I heard that your new at pip and i'd like to say WELCOME TO PIP!!!!!!!!!!!!
And now back to the poem...
I LOVED it!!!!!!!!!!!
My friend feels this right now...I hope he does feel better....
And i also hope you feel better too!!!!!!!

Well i know how you feel...I definitly felt thi way about myself...But i never told anyone I just kept my feelings hidden...
And every now and again i feel like there's no point in living...But enough of that...
Hey Brittany...If you do wanna be my friend i'll give you my e-mail adress!!!!!!!!!!!
Okays byes!

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6 posted 2002-08-26 12:28 PM


I really enjoyed this and hope you find a receptive home here.
anya
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London, UK
7 posted 2002-08-26 01:52 PM


wow, this was...amazing, it flowed really well
anya

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