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Teen Poetry #5

The Phone Call

Otaku
Junior Member

since 2002-08-13

Posts 39
Western Australia

0 posted 2002-08-23 04:34 AM

Breathless.
You are breathless.
Your heart pumps harder and harder
And harder.
Frozen fingers.
Numb limbs.

Paralysed without motion.

Your body fights.
It fights so hard.
So hard, to overcome this
Frustration of
Anxiety.

Exhale without inhale.
Hurriedly searching for a pocket of air
Your lungs scream and cry
For breath.

Frightened and afraid,
You are.

Stream by stream, warm
Tears flow quietly down your cheek,
Like the trickling of
Rain.

Cry.
You cry as the lady on
The phone tells you in a
Quite, sensitive voice...

“...Your daughter has been murdered.”

skyshine

Member Elite

since 2002-02-07

Posts 3058
Beneath the northern stars

1 posted 2002-08-23 09:20 AM

The ending disturbed me some. I thought it was going to be a break up phone call. Very sad that this happens.

~Beth

You look inside my wild mind
never knowing what you'll find
still I want you all the time
yeah I do
'cause you get me
~Michelle Branch

Tamma

Senior Member

since 2000-01-17

Posts 794
In His Arms, Harpers Ferry, WV

2 posted 2002-08-23 11:21 AM

I was expecting a break up call too...this made my hair stand up.... *brrr* goosebumps

Good write...

Tamma

Have you ever heard that "No shirt, No shoes" rule? My question is...Why doesn't that rule include pants?

anya
Member

since 2002-07-27

Posts 393
London, UK

3 posted 2002-08-23 01:25 PM

Personally I like poems that are a little disturbing and surprise you and this poem met both those requirments
anya

branden726

Senior Member

since 2000-09-25

Posts 607
Bay City, MI

4 posted 2002-08-23 01:34 PM

Me shutters I umm dont know what to say... Nice poem... ?

DancinQueen

Senior Member

since 2000-07-29

Posts 1092
Kokomo,IN,USA

5 posted 2002-08-23 02:20 PM

goodness...the end sure threw me for a loop lol I, too, was thinking this was a breakup poem. Boy was I wrong. This was very good...one of those poems that gives you chills down your spine

Excellent

*Kiley

**You can't always trust the people you want to**

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