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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl 
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Pretty in Pink Chased and then shunned Living for you- as you've molded me. Woke up today, ...wondering... What do you want from me? A slave to your ideal and trapped amongst your hypocrisy; What you've failed to be- I must now manage. Muster up the courage, for another day; With fluffy hair, and painted lips, just so you can judge your creation. I finally realize, as I tear apart the puppet strings... You are not my God- and nobody's savior. Who are you to push me down, and change me to fit... your perfection? It's over. |
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LCBS Senior Member
since 2001-11-29
Posts 532Connecticut |
I must now manage. "Muster up the courage, for another day; With fluffy hair, and painted lips, just so you can judge your creation. I finally realize, as I tear apart the puppet strings..." I especially liked these lines, you have summed up a lot of what I feel. I interpreted it two seperate ways, one being you are talking to some figure in your life pressuring you to be perfect, and another being that you yourself are the perfectionist. That is what really appealed to me, because I find myself being the largest critic in my life...and this poem almost put it into words... ooo I have an idea for a poem! hehe great write ~Lisa |
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Savage Quiescence Member
since 2002-07-29
Posts 326Wandering |
This is one poem that certainly speaks for itself. An incredibly wonderful write on a subject many of us try and approach but often times simply cannot find the words. But you managed to do a terrific job, and I thank you for sharing it! I also especially enjoyed the lines that Lisa posted. ~Sky "Whatever life brings, I've been through everything, but now I'm on my knees again" -Creed |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
Oh, this one pissed me off on your behalf! Who is he? Where can I find him? Grrr! I love the way you bluntly say "it's over" at the end! Great job! *goes male hunting* |
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devil_tongue Member
since 2000-03-02
Posts 50 |
BOOYA! *hands you a stake and says attack* Jenn, this is so strong and I'm really proud of you for this. Damn right it's over. It's over with bells on it! Sorry...getting a little emotional but you know how it is. Very good structure with lots of emotion and yummy bits.  Loved it, love you and yeah! Go Jenn, go!  Me. ROAR!! |
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vixengrl04 Member
since 2001-04-26
Posts 495East Haddam, CT |
Jenn, How dare someone try to morph you into what they want you to be!! This is one thing that I think is very, very wrong. I like this poem alot, and I love that you were able to take control of the situation in the way you ended the poem. Keep posting!!  Always, Nikki *~Fighting for your love~* |
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dj29 Junior Member
since 2002-08-19
Posts 13Florida |
great poem Jenn hopefully ill start getting some constructive critiques on mine in order to do that im gonna go see what others wrote Bubbye Danny "I still believe, in spite of everything, that people are truly good at heart" ~Anne Frank, Diary entry from 15 July 1944. |
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anawnda Member
since 2002-07-26
Posts 113 |
nice job, i know how it feels like to be a slave to perfection because i hang out w/those type of people. * you can hurt me...with your bare hands,or |
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Kevin
since 1999-11-02
Posts 729Torrington, Ct, Usa |
who says its a man? maybe a mother |
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Tamma
since 2000-01-17
Posts 794In His Arms, Harpers Ferry, WV |
I agree with Kevin...It could be a mother trying to live thru her daughter, or relive her younger years thru her...Or a man, just as well - if it is a man, its tyme to kick him to the curb! Sorry...I've been venting alot lately...recently got dumped for a really messed up reason... ~ Tamma Marian Have you ever heard that "No shirt, No shoes" rule? My question is...Why doesn't that rule include pants? |
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branden726
since 2000-09-25
Posts 607Bay City, MI |
Hey jen jen, remember me? Well I hope you do im just here to give you some good advice. Keep on writting this is really lovely I thought i was looking at another post of yours and i typed the wrong thing in sorry's lol :-p im kinda "new" again [This message has been edited by branden726 (08-22-2002 05:35 PM).] |
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Tiger Junior Member
since 2002-08-18
Posts 24Queensland, Australia |
I try to tackle the same topic and nothing comes out except just a whole lot of jibberish that is why i like the way you have wrote it. I look forward into reading more of your work. -Tiger |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Thanks everyone for your comments and opinions. This just...came to me when I was feeling a tad frustrated and angry with some people in my life, and how I was letting them get to me. I feel a bit better now, and I'm hopefully moving forward. Thanks again everyone. Luv you all Jenn Why is it that we are at our most ingenius only when trying to destroy the things that keep us alive and thriving? |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
Hey Jen I'll have to admit when I clicked on this because of the Title this wasn't what I was expected, but it was excellent. I really liked the bluntness at the end, really shows your power and self-confidence. Guys are jerk until you find a good one. Keep your head up!~Kiley **You can't always trust the people you want to** |
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