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Teen Poetry #5

"Christian"

anawnda
Member

since 2002-07-26

Posts 113

0 posted 2002-08-22 05:41 AM

"christian" 7/26-27/02

If you were this cigarette,
I would puff all
life out off you
'till you're nothing but ashes.

But here, now
it is this heart
that feels like
cigarette butt
squashed flat
on cold-muddy ground.

***
Christian Vasquez,
why do you mess with me so?
have i not suffered enough?

* you can hurt me...with your bare hands,or
you can hurt me with the sharp edge of what you said.....* jewel kilcher

vixengrl04
Member

since 2001-04-26

Posts 495
East Haddam, CT

1 posted 2002-08-22 01:48 PM

This was a really interesting little poem and I really liked the metaphor that you had going on. Nice job!!

Always,
Nikki

     *~Fighting for your love~*
    *~Is something I cannot do~*
   *~I'm not good enough to win~*
*~And I'm not strong enough to lose~*

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