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DancinQueen
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0 posted 2002-08-16 10:40 PM



-=At This Point=-

Its at this point
when the walls begin to tear
my thoughts cave in
and im left with nothing
my dreams have floated away
on those silver-laced clouds
that only stay for awhile
And its at this point
after it's all fallen
to the depths of night
my body is drained
of all its worth
and i only long to rest my soul
...that tomorrow begins

**You can't always trust the people you want to**

© Copyright 2002 Kiley - All Rights Reserved
Jenn Cirrincione
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1 posted 2002-08-16 10:45 PM


Hey Kiley.
I've missed reading your work here.
I really understand this, sort of like giving up and hoping to start over you know?
I am so RIGHT there.

..."and im left with nothing
my dreams have floated away
on those silver-laced clouds
that only stay for awhile.."

Beautifully done.

Jenn

Why is it that we are at our most ingenius only when trying to destroy the things that keep us alive and thriving?

knightlyshadows
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2 posted 2002-08-17 01:52 AM


Hey Kiley,
it's been awhile since i've read from you and i've missed it. miss all the faces of old pip.
I agree with jenn here, this was beautifully done. I think we've all been there at one point...
I especially liked this part:
quote:
And its at this point
after it's all fallen
to the depths of night
my body is drained
of all its worth
and i only long to rest my soul
...that tomorrow begins


..good luck in life Kiley.
tiff

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"Words are windows to the heart."

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3 posted 2002-08-17 12:39 PM


A nice vent, DancinQueen. It seemed like as soon as you wanted to only get some rest, you had to start all over again....I can certainly relate to that! It's well done.

~Beth

You look inside my wild mind
never knowing what you'll find
still I want you all the time
yeah I do
'cause you get me
~Michelle Branch

DancinQueen
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4 posted 2002-08-17 02:46 PM


Thank you I kind of suprised myself with this one because I just clicked on New Topic and started writing...no clue where it was headed and it actually ended up pretty nice. gotta love it when that happens But thank you all!

-=Kiley

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5 posted 2002-08-20 10:44 AM


That only tells you how much talent you truly have within you.

Prolly my favorite of your writings
This is totally written differently from the rest
I just love it

ps. stop being away on AIM

là où est mon amour?
donde está mi amour?
wo ist meine Liebe?
Nelly Furtado é a menina a mais bonita no mundo largo do todo.


DancinQueen
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6 posted 2002-08-21 04:40 PM


when did u change ure name

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Acies
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7 posted 2002-08-22 04:38 PM


Ron changed it a couple weeks back

là où est mon amour?
donde está mi amour?
wo ist meine Liebe?
Nelly Furtado é a menina a mais bonita no mundo largo do todo.


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