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WhiteRose
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somebody's dungeon

0 posted 2002-08-12 10:27 PM



Where do they go I wonder
when they are pushed aside
just thrown to the curb
so another can reside
in a heart that's taken
the life of some fool
and then another after that
where was the golden rule?
Where is the passion
in a game of give it all
where is the hero
who picks up a heart that falls
prey to a lover
who uses then tosses
never looking back
never caring for the losses?
It's best to be careful
guard your feelings real close
don't let your heart be taken
just used by one who knows
that we all look for love
and for friendship in this place
don't let them leave you lonely
wandering helpless in your space.

WhiteRose

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skyshine
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Beneath the northern stars
1 posted 2002-08-12 11:55 PM


I like this....good advice and well said.

~Beth

You look inside my wild mind
never knowing what you'll find
still I want you all the time
yeah I do
'cause you get me
~Michelle Branch

Dark Enchantress
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2 posted 2002-08-13 03:39 PM


I normally hate "advice poems" because they usually come out sounding extremely corny. But this poem actually contained some really good advice and it sounded great too. So kudos to you.

The ending was my favourite.. it can be difficult ending a poem well and you pulled it off nicely.

"don't let them leave you lonely
wandering helpless in your space"

I'm married to Mr.Metaphor. We make love everyday.

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3 posted 2002-08-14 04:23 AM


great poem i really liked it hope to see more from you. tks for the read.
robin

you either like me for who i am or you don't like me at all

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