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Spine Grinder
Senior Member

since 2000-10-28

Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...

0 posted 2002-08-08 08:06 PM

Wrap my heart,
in a blanket of your love.
Don't make me part,
with its comforting warmth.
When you kissed me,
my lips are still on fire.
Why can't you see,
my soul burns for you.
Using your fingertips,
to explore my face.
Your hands on my hips,
as we danced around.
I don't wanna let you go,
just stay here with me.
I wish time would go slow,
let us be together.
Firey embers glowing hot,
they'll never go cold.
How much happiness you brought,
you'll never know.
I tried to melt,
that glacier you call a heart.
How you ever felt,
I still don't know.
I guess you can't mix,
fire and ice.
Are you sure we can't fix,
these broken feelings?

~Ur feelings never change, u just learn 2 hide them~

Punk Angel
Member

since 2001-07-25

Posts 66
Pennsylvania, US

1 posted 2002-08-08 10:36 PM

holy crap staci! this poem is REALLY intense!! i cant believe how much uve changed as a writer from like, a year ago!! ur poems have always been good, but the change is, insane! lol neways, wut im tryin to say is, i really like it, i cant find ne imporvements whatsoever to be made! luv ya gurl~kris

ps maybe u should be a writer wen u grow up, uve always been good at that, n its better then ur "other" job u had lined up!! lol

Spine Grinder
Senior Member

since 2000-10-28

Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...

2 posted 2002-08-08 10:40 PM

thanks kris...i'm glad u liked it..

~Ur feelings never change, u just learn 2 hide them~

Dark Enchantress
Senior Member

since 1999-07-27

Posts 1258
meet Morgana

3 posted 2002-08-12 02:58 PM

"I guess you can't mix,
fire and ice."

That just says it all...

Good piece. The emotion to me was rather gripping. Maybe I'm just hypersensitive about these things, but that's what struck me the most about this poem. I hope that things work out for you one way or another. Keep writing.. that'll probably help.. and then I'll have good poetry to read.

I'm married to Mr.Metaphor. We make love everyday.

paper doll
Member

since 2002-08-04

Posts 133
Floating on Uncertainty

4 posted 2002-08-13 04:26 AM

Sad yet a reality. I like the metaphors you've used in here. They highlight a mature style of writing when you can break away from the trivial desciptions into something a little more...well adultish.

Thanks for sharing.

~M

Imagination=nostalgia for the past, the absent; it is the liquid solution in which art develops the snapshots of reality.

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