Teen Poetry #5 |
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doors, or something like it |
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knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
twist and pull turn and push slip inside or rush outside back:kcab and throf:forth open, close squeak or g r o a n doortodoor ok, derived from boredom, this popped into my head after reading lisa's chip poem and lady in white's (if i remember correctly) idea. with a twist of course. -tiff “A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.” |
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Local Parasite![]()
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
Hey Tiff ![]() I get to be the first reply! Hehe... OK, well here's the scoop - I love this idea, it's a great technique. But it felt like the only thing you were doing (probably because it was derived from boredom) was talkin about the format and how you were writing the poem. Couldn't you instead introduce some kind of message or content into this poem and still make the formatting valid? Just a thought. Other than that, neat way with words, babe. Talk to you soon. Parasite |
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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
Well, even though in my twisted metaphorically infatuated little mind I could find a message or meaning behind this... in a general sense.. it really doesn't offer anything. I mean the idea is good, but it could use some work. Hey at least you tried... I still haven't. ![]() I'm married to Mr.Metaphor. We make love everyday. |
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paper doll Member
since 2002-08-04
Posts 133Floating on Uncertainty |
My head is twisting in every direction to try and get the message to this but I just can't get it. *damnit damnit damnit damnit* You get the message. ![]() I can tell there is something behind it but I'm sorry, just can't get it. Divulge the details. ![]() ~M Imagination=nostalgia for the past, the absent; it is the liquid solution in which art develops the snapshots of reality. |
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