Teen Poetry #5 |
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Velvet Ropes |
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Kevin![]()
since 1999-11-02
Posts 729Torrington, Ct, Usa ![]() |
She’s an O’keeffe Simple Bright Beautiful Always in the foreground Demanding attention Allowing everyone only so close Before checking with velvet ropes The Salvador in me is envious He stares in awe of her distinct curves Her frame I offer him no comfort For I no longer see a painting but a mirror Repressing beauty as I watch helplessly While insecurities are drawn out From inside [This message has been edited by Kevin (08-05-2002 10:15 AM).] |
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LCBS Senior Member
since 2001-11-29
Posts 532Connecticut |
![]() "For I no longer see a painting but a mirror Repressing beauty as I watch helplessly While insecurities are drawn out From inside" Those lines are amazing, how this girl becomes a reflection of your own insecuties is profound and, and, and....oh I dont know what word I am looking for, but the whole thing was awesome! ~lisa |
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Master Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867Boston, MA |
I agree with Lisa. I loved the Salvador line... great poem. (but i hate to see a great rhymer go back to free verse) ![]() |
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Allysa![]() ![]()
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
Marvelous. Simply wonderful. I've never seen you on the streets of this town, I've never seen you just hanging around, But you still tell me that you know me... ~Justin Sane |
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anya Member
since 2002-07-27
Posts 393London, UK |
oh my god, loved this so so much, clever and eloquent, could go on but I won't, anyway thankyou anya |
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