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It’s times like this that I need you the most
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It’s times like this that I need you the most |
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LCBS Senior Member
since 2001-11-29
Posts 532Connecticut |
It’s times like this that I need you the most When the empty computer screen becomes my only friend Didn’t you promise to always be there, a phone call away… Empty promises, broken promises…. It’s times like this that I need you the most When I blare the TV so I cant hear my own conscience And still the phone rings and lingers in the silence 1 ring, 2 rings….5 rings….soon, you’ll pick up soon It’s times like this that I need you the most When I turn to food for comfort, for release, for anesthetics But the phone rings faster, and the clock ticks slower tick…where are you?…tock…please...tick…tock It’s times like this that I need you the most It’s times like this that you are never here…. And still the phone rings, and the clock ticks, and the computer stares blankly into my eyes As if to silently mock me- While the TV returns its cold, mirthless stare And all the while-you are not here [This message has been edited by LCBS (08-05-2002 05:51 PM).] |
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Xeonox
since 2000-04-01
Posts 1764CA, USA |
I can relate to what you write here. Great poem. THank you for sharing. Ronil (A mask for everyday. Imagine a life without them.) |
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Cinderelly Member
since 2001-12-31
Posts 189NM, USA |
I know how you feel . . . It's torture waiting for the phone to ring. Great poem.  Life is a moderately good play w/ a badly written thrid act. - Unknown |
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MissinMyBaby New Member
since 2002-08-04
Posts 5Scarborough,Ontario,Canada |
Hey i like ur poem and i always find myself waiting for the phone to ring an when it finally does,im so happy an over joyed i understand L8tsz Ashley Smith |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
This is a good one, Lisa. I have one suggestion to make though, if you don't mind... "It’s times like this that I need you the most" I just feel like you should have a colon after the "most". That's just my opinion though. |
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Kevin
since 1999-11-02
Posts 729Torrington, Ct, Usa |
Your growing fast lisa |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
I think this is wonderful and I can completely relate to this. |
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Spine Grinder Senior Member
since 2000-10-28
Posts 1127Standing In Silence... |
wow i liked this- this was my favorite line-"As if to silently mock me"- i dunno y but i really liked that line. nice job on this piece~  ~Ultimately, we are all dead~Proximo |
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anya Member
since 2002-07-27
Posts 393London, UK |
wow, really liked this,and as others have said I can really relate. you know you have written something special when so many people can relate, thanks for sharing anya |
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