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Hallucination Member
since 2001-03-18
Posts 419 |
I've been asked a million times, If there's someone special in my life... Each time I have to answer, There is no one in peticuler... Not since I last rode train blue, Not since the last time the white doves flew... Or since the moment that night, Now there's only me myself and I... Will I ever live to see, The one that God picked for me... Or will I grow old and gray, Die without knowing one day... Will I watch my friends have kids, Happy cross their life long bridge... Will I ever get to meet, The one that God picked for me... [This message has been edited by Hallucination (08-04-2002 10:37 AM).] |
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knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
nice poem. some of the rhyming felt a bit forced, but thats just me. oO prolly cuz i suck at rhyming myself. this was my fav part: quote: the 'will I ever live to see,/The one that God picked for me...' part reminded me of a Philmore song. Good luck with your writing and keep posting. tiff “A single choice can build destinies, or destroy them.” |
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