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Dark Enchantress
Senior Member

since 1999-07-27

Posts 1258
meet Morgana

0 posted 2002-08-02 05:20 PM

Kimono band-aid will
Teach you everything and leave
You with nothing, I have
Nothing and nothing on
You

But I have my kimono band-aid
And it’ll buy me many boys
Oh and lets not forget the girls
I like them too

And we won’t be born again,
Stuck like glue – but still
We pretend because it’s all
We know how to do

(dress it up baby, dress it up)

8.2.02

"if you know me so well then tell me which hand do I use?" Tori Amos

PoetryIsLife

Senior Member

since 2001-10-27

Posts 1763
...in my boxers...

1 posted 2002-08-02 09:37 PM

Hey There Memina

I like the flow and meter of this one, memina. Nice stanza form and breaks, all that jazz. And the ending? *grins* Love it. Love it.

Oh, by the way, I thought metaphorically.

Sincerely,
SaVerite

"They say that a hero can save us. I'm not gonna stand here and wait..."

-Chad Kroger

Dark Enchantress
Senior Member

since 1999-07-27

Posts 1258
meet Morgana

2 posted 2002-08-02 09:40 PM

Yay for yummy metaphors. *hugs*

It's a good thing you did or else you'd never understand it.

"if you know me so well then tell me which hand do I use?" Tori Amos

Skyfire

Member Elite

since 2000-12-27

Posts 3381
Riding

3 posted 2002-08-03 01:38 AM

Your writing is so over my head a lot of the time (like now) but I like that. It's not often that people can write like you do.

punkrockerrobin

Senior Member

since 2001-05-15

Posts 1180
Sparks, NV

4 posted 2002-08-03 02:18 AM

i didn't like it and only one person knows why but i won't say. ok i'm done bye.

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Dark Enchantress
Senior Member

since 1999-07-27

Posts 1258
meet Morgana

5 posted 2002-08-03 02:47 AM

Uh-huh... thanks for the suggestions. I really appreciate them. You definitely gave me a lot to think about.

"if you know me so well then tell me which hand do I use?" Tori Amos

devil_tongue
Member

since 2000-03-02

Posts 50

6 posted 2002-08-03 10:38 PM

Now is where I threaten you with a cold fish and say damn you, damn you all to hell.
Jaime, wow. I'm going to be repetative and say I loved this because it honestly is a piece packed with such huge metaphoric value.

"Kimono band-aid will
Teach you everything and leave
You with nothing,"

Honestly, how can a person not enjoy it. I could highlight every single bit in it that meant something but I won't. Second stanza did the most out of all (obviously) so thank you for posting this.

~me

paper doll
Member

since 2002-08-04

Posts 133
Floating on Uncertainty

7 posted 2002-08-04 08:16 AM

This is really well written. I'm loving the depth that's involved and the imagery most deinitely. You write with such an attitude that it stands out no matter what. I'm going to look forward to reading more of your pieces.

Thank you so much for allowing me the chance to read this.

~M

Imagination=nostalgia for the past, the absent; it is the liquid solution in which art develops the snapshots of reality.

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