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Teen Poetry #5

Poetic Venting

StellarChica
Member

since 2002-07-06

Posts 207
floating down a river...

0 posted 2002-08-01 08:40 PM

This is a poem I wrote just to vent some feelings. So it has no structure or rhyming or anything but oh well.

I don't know what hurts more,
The fact that we can't be together now,
Or that we'll never have a chance,
When it was all just a dream,
A crazy fantasy of mine,
That was fine,
Then you had to say those words,
You had to turn it into reality,
Even though you knew,
You knew it wasn't possible,
And now I'm left here,
With this burning desire,
To feel your arms around me,
But you're too far away,
Why couldn't you have left it alone,
And left me with only my daydreams?
Now my world is falling apart,
All because you had to say it,
You had to say just what I wanted to hear,
And I still don't know what hurts more.

*~erin~*

"I like Erins...especially the you kind."-Ryan

[This message has been edited by StellarChica (08-01-2002 08:56 PM).]

Kandi
Member

since 2000-06-14

Posts 354
North of Hell

1 posted 2002-08-02 01:16 AM

Powerful cuz its true...they say what doesnt kill u makes u stronger, but still sometimes its hard to figure out if something painful was really worth the trouble. I thought u did an excellent job here. Kudos!
K

The day you were born, you were born free
That is your privilege.

anya
Member

since 2002-07-27

Posts 393
London, UK

2 posted 2002-08-02 08:32 AM

hey i hope that venting your feelings made you feel a bit better, i love doing that with poetry just getting rid of stuff, anyway liked the poem
anya

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