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you were never there
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you were never there |
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*~p.r.i.n.c.e.s.s.~* Junior Member
since 2002-07-25
Posts 38 |
**you were never there** i've carried this weight all on my own you were never there i was always alone despite your harsh words i'm gonna make it through i don't need any help especially not from you all those nights i cried to you you never looked my way and now you want to listen while you're begging me to stay now you want to be here when you never were before i've dealt with you for way too long and i don't have the strength to anymore.... |
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Kandi Member
since 2000-06-14
Posts 354North of Hell |
One suggestion - perhaps you could describe how he wasn't there for you, or more on how it made you feel, just to add some gusto to the poem But i honestly did think this was an excellent piece....good for you for realizing you deserve someone who will be there for you!  Great work hereK The day you were born, you were born free |
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anya Member
since 2002-07-27
Posts 393London, UK |
loved this, while reading this poem it was like you had taken the thoughts right out of my head and written them down, i can relate so well, anyway good job anya |
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