Teen Poetry #5 |
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Moonlit Night |
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Master Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867Boston, MA ![]() |
The game is ending. It's going to be over soon. And now, He has a chance to run the table. Behind the cue-ball of the moon, Almighty's aiming for the eight-ball. Check out my poetry here: |
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clve527 Member
since 2002-07-08
Posts 200 |
This is an interesting piece, BUT I really stumbled on the soon. I can see with your rhyme scheme that you want it on the next line, but it really does more harm than good I think. Good topic though. Casey If all you want is emotion, go down to walmart, buy yourself a diary and hide it in a drawer where no one can see... |
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MIdsummerRain Member
since 2002-05-19
Posts 175St. Louis, Missouri |
Intersting Structure; The only part that puzzles me is the last line . . . There seems to be somthing missing ~Rayne One day Men will look back & say |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Master- I really like this one. Much enjoyed reading it. ![]() ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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Kandi Member
since 2000-06-14
Posts 354North of Hell |
Very interesting concept. One of the more creative ones ive read ![]() GOod work! looking forward to more! K The day you were born, you were born free |
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