Teen Poetry #5 |
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running on memories |
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anya Member
since 2002-07-27
Posts 393London, UK |
I think we are both done now I'm tired of these melancholy tunes you make me sing we've come to that point, the one where we know there are no possibilities left Is it me or is the darkness getting darker? And we can't go on running on memories we've given it one shot one too many times and being alone don't seem so bad anymore we both begin to long for the silence of solitude rather than the turbulance of together this is the first time that I have posted here and would just like to say that I am really impressed, there is a really high standard here, have not yet read anything i have disliked anya |
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StellarChica Member
since 2002-07-06
Posts 207floating down a river... |
I really liked this piece. I liked the alliteration used in 'silence of solitude' and 'turbulence of together'. Good job and welcome to passions! I'm pretty new myself. Most of the people here are really cool, though. Well have a great day ![]() *~erin~* "Longing for home again but home is a feeling I buried in you."-Greenwheel |
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Local Parasite![]()
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
Oh my, this is definitely something unique. You have a very subtle way of using techniques, so that they are almost invisible, but still serve their effect. I've heard women say that the best way to put on makeup is so that you don't notice that it's even on, you only notice how much prettier the person looks. The same goes for poetry, when using techniques... I note the use of consonance, assonance and flow... you are more advanced than you appear on the surface. An enigma. I don't consider myself a regular by any means, but welcome to Passions in Poetry. I hope you promptly post some of your other work, I'm very intrigued by this piece itself. Parasite |
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anya Member
since 2002-07-27
Posts 393London, UK |
thankyou!, I'm glad that you liked it anya |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Anya, welcome to Passions! Yes, the standards ARE high, but they are friendly standards, and as you come to know many of us, you will feel the quality of a wonderful home... Look around, enjoy, and most of all, have fun! Karilea |
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