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Zombie Man
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since 1999-06-22

Posts 52
Va

0 posted 2001-07-15 12:17 PM

Looking at that girl, she's so beautiful.
Will there be hope for I,
After she comes with me.
The world doesn't know,
She is my drug in life.
And I'd anything for her.

I just lay and close my eyes.
Sweet dreams of her appear.
For now all I can think..
Is of her with me.

Holding her so close.
I whisper in her ear.
Our love is one.
Now our lives have become clear.
People have there say,
That we shouldn't be.
I will not give up.
And hope she'll stay with me.
And I pray for her grace.
In arms of my care.
I will keep my place,
Right next to her side....

I can still see her...
Even so far away..
I can still feel you...
Even so far away..
I can still hear you...
Even so far away..
I still love you....

xShUgArHiGhx

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since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

1 posted 2001-07-15 12:25 PM

What a lucky girl melanie is to have such a beautiful poem written about her and have someone feel this strongely about her...i think you should give this to her...its so sweet!

Spice
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since 2001-04-13

Posts 1266
Resting in my cardboard box.

2 posted 2001-07-15 12:33 PM

OOoooo Michael and Melanie sitting in a tree... hehehe
This was incredibly sweet. I absolutely loved it. Melanie should feel so lucky to have a guy that cares so much about her as you obviously do. WONDERFUL WRITE!

CwboyAtHeart
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since 2001-04-14

Posts 541
Selah, WA, USA

3 posted 2001-07-15 01:38 AM

Ya, ya'll just gotta go havin' perfect love lives, don't u?

Nah, it's all good. I liked the poem. Keep writin'.

- Cody -

If Pigs Can Fly, So Can I!!!

If someboy laughs at me, does that make me funny or just plain stupid?

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

4 posted 2001-07-15 01:41 AM

a beautiful tribute...wonderful job on writing this..thanks for sharing it

im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

5 posted 2001-07-15 04:51 AM

very sweet poem here. I liked it a lot. Still kinda sad....the ending. She live somewhere? Long distance stuff going on, or is this internally far away?
Anyhow, it was nice.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

6 posted 2001-07-16 03:01 AM

This was well written, Michael. The only thing I would change is in the second line. It reads: "Will there be hope for I". It would be better grammatically if it was: "Will there be hope for me". This is very sweet, though. I wish you two the best of luck

--Marie

You can’t expect the roses to grow without the weeds.

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