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Skyfire

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since 2000-12-27

Posts 3381
Riding

0 posted 2001-07-12 11:53 PM

I just want... to cry.

But at the same time I don't.
How can I cry when I don't know what about?
I feel nothing.
Something's missing from my life, but I don't know what it is.

I just feel... empty.

Maybe if I could cry it would help.
Maybe if I could find what I need I'd be okay.
I feel nothing, not even pain.
I'm numbed by the news reports, I don't know what pain is anymore.

I just feel... blank.

I have no inspiration for anything at all.
Why can't I write? Why can't I sing?
I can't love myself.
I used to love myself, but now I don't even think about myself.

I just feel...out of it.

Attention? Sure, I love it.
I used to do anything for it.
But not now.
Now I just want to fade away in the background, and maybe someone'll miss me.

I just feel... lonely.

I wish I could talk.
But nobody will listen to me.
Doesn't matter.
I just talk to much anyway, I have too many problems for other people to handle.

I just feel... deserted.

I'm not asking for someone to handle my problems.
I just want someone to listen.
No one will listen.
How can they listen when I don't know what's wrong myself?

I just want... to cry.

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

1 posted 2001-07-13 12:25 PM

wow...i can relate to this...your expression of how you wrote it...hit me home...VERY emotional and sad..hope things get better.

im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

5_sweet_kisses
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since 2001-04-20

Posts 49

2 posted 2001-07-13 01:57 AM

good job, that was very nice

Shygirl82
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since 2001-02-19

Posts 245
Ilinois

3 posted 2001-07-13 03:37 AM

Wow.....I really liked this one ALOT. I am really sorry you feel this way and I hope things get better very soon...excellent poem.
~Nikki~

It takes only a minute to like someone, a hour to love someone, but a lifetime to forget them.

anonymousfemale
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

4 posted 2001-07-13 03:39 AM

Rhonda, the emotion that you have portrayed in this piece is very well done. The way you left pauses between key parts of the poem really did it justice.
If you ever need to talk about anything email me at: [email protected]. It mightn't be much but one ear is better than not being heard at all.

Take care and thanks for sharing.

~AF~

GREMLINS ARE TRYING TO STEAL MY PANTS!!!!!!! *sobs*

Spice
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since 2001-04-13

Posts 1266
Resting in my cardboard box.

5 posted 2001-07-13 04:08 PM

Damn Rhonda- I can relate to this so much it's scary. I loved it. You expressed your emotions and feelings perfectly. I hope things get better.

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

6 posted 2001-07-15 04:54 AM

I REALLY liked this one! You wrote this so awesome. I loved the little dots (we call them cherish's LOL) cuz they added a lot of effect to the poem for me.
Awesome job here. GREAT poem!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

7 posted 2001-07-16 03:03 AM

I LOVED the dramatic pauses in the lines here. The way you wrote this was awesome. The form of the poem, and the emotions all throughout... wow, wonderful work. You really seemed to have poured yourself into this one. Very nicely done. I REALLY enjoyed this.

--Marie

You can’t expect the roses to grow without the weeds.

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