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Singing My Own Song
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Singing My Own Song |
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Jessica
since 2001-06-28
Posts 350South AL 
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Here lately I have been going through a strong writter's block...*sigh*... This is what I came up with tonight. It isn't my strongest work but please tell me what you think and give me suggestions. I need to get back in the flow of writting. 11:57 PM 7/6/01 desperate cries unheard through the mask I hold to my heart not a single word to finish what I start emotions blocked behind my soul seeming eternity so long I've fallen in this deep hole singing my own song my lies becoming my truth my heart reaching out to you where is my youth... what shall I do? What don't kill you can only make you stronger... |
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CwboyAtHeart Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 541Selah, WA, USA |
I really liked this. This is totally awesome, especially for just coming out of writers block. Keep up the good work. - Cody - |
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knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
i liked this jess...alot. think u did a great job on it. cant wait to c more of ur work. wut part of Al u from btw? :p tiff  “A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.” |
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Jessica
since 2001-06-28
Posts 350South AL |
I am from this itty, bitty, teenie weenie, smal town called Brewton. Like the biggest thing we have is a Wal-Mart. And it's the "major hang-out" ... I am originally from Auburn AL, though.  [This message has been edited by Jessica (edited 07-07-2001).] |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
i liked it...your expression was interesting in this one...great job!..jess#2. im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
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Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
This was a great poem. The flow was broken in some places, but it still sounded great! *Amanda* |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
Not my favorite from you...But All the same, it's still a very well written poem. Nice job. |
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Jessica
since 2001-06-28
Posts 350South AL |
Quick question... Where was the flow broken? So I can fix it... |
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Kicking Kim Member
since 2001-04-16
Posts 426Cloud Cucko Land! |
I thin this is the first I have read of yours and so far its pretty good. Keep writing!! ^*~Kicking Kim~*^ "Theres no posession, just obsession and growing depression" |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Well done here Jessica. I liked this one.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Maynard Junior Member
since 2001-06-29
Posts 12IL |
pretty damn good for writers block "I have nothing to tell you or sell you for the moment... but thank you for asking." |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Where is the writer's block is the question. you express yourself really well with your poems You should keep writing Thanks for sharing Jessica hi Sweets, Lizzy, Kris, Ina, Erin, Erica, Minna, Kit, Kamie, Javi, Jenn, Sharon, Nan, Cawlee, Cherish, Ashley, Sara, Justine, Leah, Jess, Kimmie, Mare |
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Shygirl82 Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 245Ilinois |
Wow I wish I could write like this when I had writers block. This is really good and I thought you did an excellent job. ~Nikki~ It takes only a minute to like someone, a hour to love someone, but a lifetime to forget them. |
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branden726
since 2000-09-25
Posts 607Bay City, MI |
What a writers block, ya know i love to read poems but when i read ones like this it makes me think cuz i used to write like this once and in my head i felt like i was dead but in my mind i felt fine this was a wonderful poem and im just leting you know what i think... |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
You might want to count the number of syllables in your lines. That way if you feel the flow is broken, you can go back to the line and fix it up. It's a good piece but the ending is a little weak. Thanks for the read. ~AF~ Psychopathic chickens are plotting against me... |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
This is well done, Jess. I really liked the emotions throughout this piece... it seemed like a big call for help to me. While I was reading this, I was listening to Linkin Park's Crawling, and it was awesome with that. I really enjoyed this. Nice work! --Marie You can’t expect the roses to grow without the weeds. |
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