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Teen Poetry #5

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quietlydying

Senior Member

since 2001-06-10

Posts 935
the wonderful land of oz

0 posted 2002-07-25 03:53 PM

Ageless smiles
wither away
into the
cold, crisp
dirty winter -
as
once again I shroud
my Infidelity
in YOUr open arms.

/jen/

so foul and fair a day i have not seen. - macbeth act 1, scene 3

Dark Enchantress
Senior Member

since 1999-07-27

Posts 1258
meet Morgana

1 posted 2002-07-25 04:08 PM

Hey, I dig it. Isn't that cool? Maybe we should dance. Hmm...

How are you? I'm peachy. Senior pictures. Spectacular.

I actually really like this. Sometimes I get from your poems different than what you intend, but oh well.. I don't care if you don't. I've been the little infidelity bitch before so I understand where you're going with the words. Groovy.

*waves*

"if you know me so well then tell me which hand do I use?" Tori Amos

*~p.r.i.n.c.e.s.s.~*
Junior Member

since 2002-07-25

Posts 38

2 posted 2002-07-28 04:15 PM

yeah not capitalizing my i's in my poems IS out of pure laziness. i really dont care if my poems LOOK nice,like as long as i think they SOUND nice. when i write poetry, i do it for me. not anyone else so if that bothers you, then sorry, but like i said i do it for me. but thatx for the note anyways.

Master
Senior Member

since 1999-08-18

Posts 1867
Boston, MA

3 posted 2002-07-29 02:12 AM

I like your previous posts better. I think this is one is a bit chiche. Just my two cents.

devil_tongue
Member

since 2000-03-02

Posts 50

4 posted 2002-07-29 07:23 AM

Nice work, Jen. Excellent use of imagery with a well constructed format. Loving it as per usual.

Keep it up.

anya
Member

since 2002-07-27

Posts 393
London, UK

5 posted 2002-07-29 08:44 AM

likr this alot, it is very well put
anya

Jenn Cirrincione

Member Elite

since 2000-07-02

Posts 2107
Fl

6 posted 2002-07-29 12:25 PM

I like your style, it's unique.
Nice work in such few words.

Jenn

Why is it that we are at our most ingenius only when trying to destroy the things that keep us alive and thriving?

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