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StellarChica
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0 posted 2002-07-17 06:48 PM



I've always wanted to believe,
What my horoscope said,
Good or bad,
I wanted it to be true,
I wanted to believe it when it said:
Today will be your day to shine.
I would walk around all day thinking,
That I would soon get my chance to shine,
But what was I shining for?
Even I didn't know.
Being the hopeless romantic that I am,
I loved waking up and reading that:
Flirtation could me more serious than it appears.
But who was I flirting with?
I was dying to find the answers to life's questions,
Inside the morning paper.

"Then again, you're always first when no one's on your side."-incubus

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Kielo
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1 posted 2002-07-18 01:31 AM


I like it, but it sounds like a beginning. I think it needs more development. Either one day it came true, or you realized that horoscopes were junk. Just my opinion though.
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2 posted 2002-07-22 09:34 AM


I love looking at my horoscope too.
thanks for sharing

là où est mon amour?
donde está mi amour?
wo ist meine Liebe?
Nelly Furtado é a menina a mais bonita no mundo largo do todo.


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3 posted 2002-07-23 11:55 AM


the title could be, um "printed future", with the emphasis on the word printed. Just a suggestion.

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shadowchild458
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4 posted 2002-07-23 02:03 PM


i rather like getting my fortunes from fortune cookies but hey maybe the paper is more true!

life may just take a while but i guess heaven's worth the wait

AKJ

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5 posted 2002-07-29 12:24 PM


haha horoscopes
I read them too sometimes.
Cute poem.

Jenn

Why is it that we are at our most ingenius only when trying to destroy the things that keep us alive and thriving?

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