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NSnaomian Member
since 2002-07-22
Posts 232In my troll closet I be |
The day goes by sun up, sun down we drink black coffee we wish on the star You sit and chat I linger and listen You love your mind I cant speak its words Others work all day I can't find the job They lounge and write I mold and read The day goes by sun up, sun down We rise, we lay The day is what you make it |
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Android 17
since 2001-07-21
Posts 664Winnipeg |
NSnaomain, I'll have to admit, this poem made me smile! It wasn't depressing like most of the Teen Poetry is/was---and it was wholesome. Which I found, was stellar! I loved how you had the beginning...and the end was very similiar to it---but it transisted into it's own stanza. Be sure to write here more, okay? You'll do JUST FINE!  Just know, you already have a fan!And if someone hasn't already done so---WELCOME TO PASSIONS, NSnaomian!!! Others are too in love with the sound of their own voice to speak the truth... |
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StellarChica Member
since 2002-07-06
Posts 207floating down a river... |
That was great! I loved it!! Good work!! *~erin~* "Then again, you're always first when no one's on your side."-incubus |
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Chel2082 Junior Member
since 2002-07-23
Posts 40Baltimore, MD |
cool piece...i liked how it went together so well. Keep up the great work. <3 Chel With GOD all things are possible...<3 CHEL |
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