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Moonlight Drowning
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Moonlight Drowning |
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Jenabou Member
since 2000-06-13
Posts 215Oklahoma/Nova Scotia Canada/USA 
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The moonlight, dances along the water. I walk in circles, hypnotized lost in a transe from the spell it has me under. I lose my footing S P L A S H Im sinking, slowly. The moonlight, dances above me. I struggle, reach, but can't get to the surface. I inhale, water fills my lungs Im drowning... ...in your love *for someone who's used to heartache,losing it all was just a matter of time* |
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Android 17
since 2001-07-21
Posts 664Winnipeg |
Wow!!! This is so...ominously cute!!! At first, I wasn't sure WHAT it was about---then...well, WOW! I loved this! Heh-heh-heh...it's been a while since I've read something so simple, yet complex in the same notion. Again, this was very well done! *snaps fingers* Great job, now keep it up! Lol Heheh...and I'm glad you've found a love that you could uh---drown in! Lol You know what I mean! Jenabou---I salute you!!! Others are too in love with the sound of their own voice to speak the truth... |
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StellarChica Member
since 2002-07-06
Posts 207floating down a river... |
I really liked this poem! It was really good! Keep up the good work!  *~erin~* "Then again, you're always first when no one's on your side."-incubus |
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Chel2082 Junior Member
since 2002-07-23
Posts 40Baltimore, MD |
This was a very interesting piece especially the ending...Good job, keep it up. <3 Chel With GOD all things are possible...<3 CHEL |
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Riley
since 2002-07-18
Posts 1038in the pouring rain |
I really liked this poem. It was different but I liked it. ~*Riley*~ Deep into that darkness peering, long I stood there wondering, fearing, doubting, dreaming dreams no mortal ever dared to dream before. |
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