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lily drop New Member
since 2002-07-13
Posts 3 |
The cenery flys by The car speeds up, then slows down The rocky hills mope bythe car bumps along the paved road Radio hums the beat the car sounds with laughter the day slows down to night the stares fleck out one by one the laughter slows to an end till all that can be hurd is the sound of the car hum. |
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clve527 Member
since 2002-07-08
Posts 200 |
I am just curious, is cenery a long lost relative of celery? Casey If all you want is emotion, go down to walmart, buy yourself a diary and hide it in a drawer where no one can see... |
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LCBS Senior Member
since 2001-11-29
Posts 532Connecticut |
Some people do make mistakes, Casey (I seem to remember something with the word despise). I believe the writer meant scenery. Great job! You painted a great picture for me. Welcome to Passions! ~Lisa [This message has been edited by LCBS (07-20-2002 05:58 PM).] |
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clve527 Member
since 2002-07-08
Posts 200 |
I can understand mistakes, but my mistake was not in the poem. I put work into the poem, along with many edits over time. Besides that isn't the only mistake in this piece. Casey If all you want is emotion, go down to walmart, buy yourself a diary and hide it in a drawer where no one can see... |
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quietlydying
since 2001-06-10
Posts 935the wonderful land of oz |
har har har. immature, but amusing. you might want to proofread your work before posting. just a thought. /jen/ so foul and fair a day i have not seen. - macbeth act 1, scene 3 |
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lily drop New Member
since 2002-07-13
Posts 3 |
I have a question for you all is this (site) on how well one can spell or on the love and passion for poetry in itself? |
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clve527 Member
since 2002-07-08
Posts 200 |
Well, is the reader expected to mind read and figure out what you meant to say rather than what you did? Casey If all you want is emotion, go down to walmart, buy yourself a diary and hide it in a drawer where no one can see... |
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Spine Grinder Senior Member
since 2000-10-28
Posts 1127Standing In Silence... |
i understood what she meant, y couldnt u? ~In the end..it doesn't even matter...~LP |
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clve527 Member
since 2002-07-08
Posts 200 |
I couldn't because it is not my job as a reader to decipher a poet's mistakes in spelling. How can you honestly say that a poem that is plagued with misspellings is a good poem? Casey |
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