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FadeN2you
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since 2002-07-15
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0 posted 2002-07-21 12:00 PM



It's a platonic desire,
between these two lost souls.
And touching is only a sensation between two,
or so I have been told.

Because their love is untouchable,
even from so far away.
And when the he begins to leave,
her tears begin to play.


And they jump from her eyes,
to think pink upon her shirt,
and she complains that he
is so much more than what she's worth.


I can't do a thing,
but contemplate his moves.
Because I've seen true love wreck its havock,
and she has a lot to lose.


That doesn't stop her desire,
or the fingertips which come undone.
And she can't help but think of him,
suddenly she becomes numb.


Because this platonic desire,
ripples through these waters of time.
And she can't wait until he's back,
and I worry that love is blind.


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since 2000-04-01
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1 posted 2002-07-21 11:32 AM


I really enjoyed this poem. It made me think about the realtionship that I am in.

I especially enjoyed the last stanza
***********
Because this platonic desire,
ripples through these waters of time.
And she can't wait until he's back,
and I worry that love is blind
***********

Ronil (A mask for everyday. Imagine a life without them.)

Purple Poet On Wheels
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since 2002-06-21
Posts 145
Pittsburgh/Edinboro, PA
2 posted 2002-07-21 02:13 PM


Very cool I can relate.  It has a voyurisic quality going on
jave
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since 2002-07-10
Posts 18
CO, USA
3 posted 2002-07-21 05:54 PM


nice. I liked it, a lot. I know how it is to be that girl.
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