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Teen Poetry #5

Not Over You

Spine Grinder
Senior Member

since 2000-10-28

Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...

0 posted 2002-07-19 01:58 AM

Your a welcoming sight,
but I try with all my might,
to just stop in spite,
of my own feelings I hide.

I don't know why,
I even bother or try,
I don't want to cry,
but you lied.

We used to be two,
but now we're through,
I know I'm not over you,
so many tears I've cried.

~i kept the right ones out and let the wrong ones in~ Aerosmith~

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

1 posted 2002-07-20 01:17 AM

Closure can be so hard to come by,
I think your first verse said it all.
Well done Spine Grinder~

Xeonox

Senior Member

since 2000-04-01

Posts 1764
CA, USA

2 posted 2002-07-21 11:36 AM

One of my best friends can relate to your poem. I know how u feel . I have felt this way in the past. But sun does shine when the night is over.

I liked these lines.

**************

We used to be two,
but now we're through,

*******************

Ronil (A mask for everyday. Imagine a life without them.)

peachesNcream
Senior Member

since 2001-08-21

Posts 513
Ocean Of Tears

3 posted 2002-07-21 01:59 PM

I read this when i was over at your house..but i figured i would reply..just b/c i can!

i like the whole poem! the best part was the beginning..but good crizitism! the last line..it didnt really rhyme (how ever u spell that) but over all i liked it! ~Jess

lilibeelee
Member

since 2001-07-12

Posts 143

4 posted 2002-07-22 06:23 PM

very well done

Chel2082
Junior Member

since 2002-07-23

Posts 40
Baltimore, MD

5 posted 2002-07-23 03:12 PM

This is a good piece and I know how the end feels even when you are not ready for it to be over, but then I realize that maybe I am better off. Keep up the good work.

<3Chel

With GOD all things are possible...<3 CHEL

Punk Angel
Member

since 2001-07-25

Posts 66
Pennsylvania, US

6 posted 2002-07-23 08:32 PM

hey, nice poem i guess, its alot like that other ones tho, n there all about the same person!! lol neways, great poem, buh bye!

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