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Dark Enchantress
Senior Member

since 1999-07-27

Posts 1258
meet Morgana

0 posted 2002-07-16 11:54 AM

Connected, connec-eted, glued
Together

Sticky mess, dear boy I think
We’ve got ourselves a sticky
Mess

My name is about to change,
My body swelling up to fill
Up my Saturday mornings

Ghost found her body, she
Lives in there now and makes
Me walk her walk

‘Cause now I’m connected,
connec-eted and glued together

Another statistic

Pony babe, I'm goin'
for a ride

"if you know me so well then tell which hand do I use?" Tori Amos

[This message has been edited by Dark Enchantress (07-16-2002 11:57 AM).]

Dark Enchantress
Senior Member

since 1999-07-27

Posts 1258
meet Morgana

1 posted 2002-07-16 11:56 AM

False alarm. But I still liked the poem. So here it is.

"if you know me so well then tell me which hand do I use?" Tori Amos

[This message has been edited by Dark Enchantress (07-16-2002 11:57 AM).]

PoetryIsLife

Senior Member

since 2001-10-27

Posts 1763
...in my boxers...

2 posted 2002-07-16 03:56 PM

You had my eyebrow raised for a moment, Memina. *chuckles*

Not that anything would have changed for me. For you, though, much would have.

I, too thought the piece was good. I particularly enjoyed:

"Pony babe, I'm goin'
for a ride"

"Sticky mess, dear boy I think
We’ve got ourselves a sticky
Mess"

These lines, as well, struck me as very good. You have a funky rythm to this piece. ALmost like a Children's Ryhme, or something similar. I like it. It's intrigiuing.

"Connected, connec-eted, glued"

I'm not sure I 'get' the meaning being the repeating of connected. One would think you'd write it "con-nec-e-ted." Then again, perhaps your splicing fits more with your rythym. Just a thought.

Enjoyed the write, memina. Nicely done.

Sincerely,
SaVerite (Titus)

As I'm out there, walking, searching, for myself, for you.... won't you join me? Let's walk this journey together.

quietlydying

Senior Member

since 2001-06-10

Posts 935
the wonderful land of oz

3 posted 2002-07-16 11:18 PM

interesting how you envy my work so much, and yet i would kill to write like you.

i'm serious.

'Sticky mess, dear boy I think
We’ve got ourselves a sticky
Mess'

i love that line to pieces.

never EVER stop writing.

/jen/

so foul and fair a day i have not seen. - macbeth act 1, scene 3

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