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Much Closer |
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MoeRocko Member
since 2001-04-25
Posts 166West Virginia |
No need to fear, I can hear your word say But my eyes filled with tears Because you felt far away So I returned to our place and to my suprise You were much closer than I realized Closer, You were much closer It took all this time to realize You were standing right by my side Sometimes my fears are hard to mask Because my storms don't want to pass So when my mind feels confused and my heart starts to stray I call upon the name of my Lord and I hear him say No Need To Fear... If there's a such thing as a Genius, then I'm one. If there's no such thing then I don't care... ~John Lennon [This message has been edited by MoeRocko (edited 07-14-2001).] |
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pure_innocence Member
since 2001-07-14
Posts 80Colorado, US |
I liked this very much, the message I derived from it was beautiful as well as common. You felt scared, alone, and searched for that which made you feel right again, knowing all along it/he/she was gone. Then after some soul searching you found it had never left, that it was closer then you'd thought. Knowing you held it inside of you "much closer" to you gave you strength, courage beyond the fear. Stop me if I'm wrong, that's just the way I interpreted it, regardless, it was beautiful. You are talented, I hope to read more of your work. |
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CwboyAtHeart Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 541Selah, WA, USA |
Wow! I loved this one. I like how you had all your problems, but in the end you found that God is always there, and you have nothing to fear. Awesome, keep writing. - Cody - |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
Nice read Moe. I enjoyed it. I'm glad you found someone to call on for strength. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Awesome work, Moe. Lots of emotion was poured into this poem... this is one of my favorites by you. Nicely done, indeed. My favorite lines were: "I call upon the name/of my Lord/and I hear him say/No Need To Fear..." Nice work!! --Marie You can’t expect the roses to grow without the weeds. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
You've come back with awesome poems. I loved this one aswell. Great job on this. The ending is mind blowing. Simply kick butt poetry.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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