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Tomer
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since 2002-06-28
Posts 1168
Michigan

0 posted 2002-06-28 02:24 PM



        Emotions running on an escalator
Eyes full of despair
An empty tank, without a drop of hope
My body wants to come to a halt
Momentarily coming to a stop
Panic pierces my skin with an icing sound
Ttssssss………
        Oxygen no longer a luxury
The scent of death creeping on the edge of hair tips
Starting to inhale a lost connection
Fingers tremble as they wobble towards my face
My eyes pass through the curtains of death
My Grandfather is dead
My heart shudders
        Death has taken me without notice
Relinquish my pain
        I am forever abandoned

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mistic
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since 2001-05-06
Posts 233
Idaho, U.S.A.
1 posted 2002-06-28 05:08 PM


this is really really good. i really liked it. the imagery and the emotion really stood out to me. amesome choice of words... keep writing and sharing
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