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Teen Poetry #5

Can't Call You

Spine Grinder
Senior Member

since 2000-10-28

Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...

0 posted 2002-06-13 09:09 PM

Please don't say goodbye,
cuz baby that'll tear me apart.
And please don't say you love me,
cuz that will break muh heart.

Tears stinging my eyes,
I try not to cry.
It's like my heart,
has just been taken from me.

I'm so lost and Confused,
tell me what I should do.
I don't think I can make it,
alone,without you.

My world has warped,
so drastically.
What to do?
Can't call you....

~¿Our lives are soap operas, no wonder so many people sit glued 2 the tv watching them.....¿~

[This message has been edited by Spine Grinder (06-13-2002 09:10 PM).]

Dark Enchantress
Senior Member

since 1999-07-27

Posts 1258
meet Morgana

1 posted 2002-06-13 09:59 PM

I really enjoyed the whole poem because it was very honest and it has this kind of heart stabbing effect on the reader. Though my favorite part was:

"My world has warped,
so drastically.
What to do?
Can't call you...."

Because it shows just how much everything can be turned upside down at the hands of love and how lost it can make you feel.

Hang in there.

[Jaime]

"I think I would like to call myself 'the girl who wanted to be God'." Sylvia Plath

peachesNcream
Senior Member

since 2001-08-21

Posts 513
Ocean Of Tears

2 posted 2002-06-19 09:16 PM

Hey! Dis one was good too! Like your last reply that one part was really well expressed! Keep writing! lyanbh ¤Jessibaca¤

~*~I believe that friends are quiet angels who lift us to our feet when our wings have trouble remembering how to fly~*~

songsoftheaftermath
Member

since 2002-06-19

Posts 84
a world of disarray

3 posted 2002-06-19 09:30 PM

breakups are hard...i hope you get through this one ok.

could the darkness be my friend?

ericaisamonkey
Member

since 2002-04-04

Posts 51
A little town north of nowhere

4 posted 2002-06-19 09:32 PM

this reminds me of some stuff...

lol. but it was a nice poem and i hope what ever tough stuff you're going through gets better! good luck, nice job

*Erica*

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