Head pains (read this one)

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Teen Poetry #5

Head pains (read this one)

SlowDrag
Member

since 2002-01-10

Posts 53
Tx...need i say more

0 posted 2002-06-12 03:49 AM

well...i'm going through some disks with my old songs on there....and posting the ones i like...here ya go...i liked this one a lot....probably just because of the melody i wrote with it.

Head Pains

try not to think of you but you're in my head
what went wrong what was done and waht was was said,
your aroma intoxicating my air
your sweet smile and your short thick brown hair
nostalgia coming in look around beware
should have used my head...should have been prepared

Chorus:
this is way to much for me to bare
when you threatened to leave i admit that i was scared.
give mea second chance...i'm sorry for what i've done.
i promise not to turn my back and run...

V2:
how could you ever dump me for that guy
a single day doesn't pass and i wonder why
i'lll talk to you if you think that i am shy
too much to ask i'm just a loney guy...

Chorus:

and all i wanna do is be there for the things you're going through....well is it good for you?...is it good for you?

[This message has been edited by SlowDrag (06-12-2002 04:00 AM).]

AngelShell
Member

since 2000-03-01

Posts 446
not heaven nor hell so...

1 posted 2002-06-15 10:57 PM

This was a really good read.
The lack of grammar in the first verse made it a little hard to read from my perspective but I really enjoyed it none the less...
Keep it up.

~I haven't memorized all of the cute things to say but I'm working on it~

ericaisamonkey
Member

since 2002-04-04

Posts 51
A little town north of nowhere

2 posted 2002-06-19 03:12 AM

very nice, would you mind if i "borrowed" the words from you and sang them for my school talent show? lol anyways nice write i did enjoy it.

*Erica*

ericaisamonkey
Member

since 2002-04-04

Posts 51
A little town north of nowhere

3 posted 2002-06-19 03:12 AM

very nice, would you mind if i "borrowed" the words from you and sang them for my school talent show? lol anyways nice write i did enjoy it.

*Erica*

shara
Member

since 2002-05-21

Posts 69
florida/USA

4 posted 2002-06-20 12:51 PM

hey, what's up? I really liked this one. You supplied an excellant choice of words and I hope to view more from you in the future?

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