blah...i changed my poem because i quoted vanilla sky wrong hahah

How to Join	Member's Area	Private Library	Search	Sanctuary		Login
Main Forums	Discussion	Tech Talk	Mature Content	Archives	A home without a wall, Our haven without ends, A circle we all call Our Family of Friends!

Teen Poetry #5

blah...i changed my poem because i quoted vanilla sky wrong hahah

SlowDrag
Member

since 2002-01-10

Posts 53
Tx...need i say more

0 posted 2002-06-10 05:47 PM

thought i'd post a poem rather than a song...here goes.

up down left right...
she moves my mind around in spite
of every thing i do for her...
and yet...i can't get enough of her.

and all i wanna do is be there for the things you're going through....well is it good for you?...is it good for you?

[This message has been edited by SlowDrag (06-10-2002 09:44 PM).]

Dopey Dope

Moderator

Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

1 posted 2002-06-10 06:04 PM

Hey I liked this one a lot. Very simple, very nicely done. I love 4 liners. I have written so many of those and I find that the 4 liners are not only the deepest, but sometimes the hardest kind of poems to write.....simply put, deeply taken...
nice