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Allysa
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0 posted 2002-06-10 02:45 PM


She thought nothing of it
when her stomach didn't tingle
whenever he was around.
And when she never felt
like she needed him all the time
she pretended not to care.
In a world where people
are made to think
that love is touch
and touch is love
and nothing else is similar
the only thing that
love is thought to be
Isn't.
She felt comfortable around him
not afraid to be herself
and when she was told
it wasn't love,
it was friendship,
she thought nothing of it.
She never longed to feel
his lips on hers
never really cared to much
about touching,
but love is touch
and touch is love
and nothing else is similar
and the only thing that
is thought to be love
Isn't.


Don't let your mind wander, it's much to small to be out by itself.

[This message has been edited by Allysa (06-10-2002 02:46 PM).]

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1 posted 2002-06-10 04:29 PM


How very true. Good write!
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2 posted 2002-06-11 12:08 PM


This poem completely rocked. Really, I LOVED It. VERY well done, you impressed me with this one. I kind of disagreed on one thing, but the reason why I liked it was because it showed me another view point on love. It made sense too. I liked the poem. Hope to see more.

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3 posted 2002-06-11 12:28 PM


Wow.  I've been waiting forever to impress you, my dear... I'm glad you like it.
Thanks to everyone who read this...

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4 posted 2002-06-11 12:29 PM


once again, thanks..
and Dopey, what did you disagree on?


Don't let your mind wander, it's much to small to be out by itself.

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5 posted 2002-06-11 05:41 PM


Well done! I liked this poem.

Kielo

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6 posted 2002-06-11 06:56 PM


Oh, well I disagreed on the fact that you were stating what love IS. Like....that love IS touch and touch IS love. I loved that you did that, I mean that is why I like the poem. Does that make sense? Liking a poem because you think differently to it? hehe

No but I don't believe that love is simply touch. I'd have to say that it is a component of many unsaid, unexplanable things. However the fact you said that love is touch was awesome.
That's basically it....

I disagreed with defining the undefinable.

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7 posted 2002-06-12 09:31 AM


I thought the structure of the poem is just plain awesome
Your best poem so far Allysa
I'm just hoping this poem aint about NITSUJ still  
*standing ovation*

là où est mon amour?
donde está mi amour?
wo ist meine Liebe?
Nelly Furtado é a menina a mais bonita no mundo largo do todo.

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8 posted 2002-06-12 09:59 PM


Oh wow Acire- because you spelled his name backwards, you COMPLETELY threw me off; I have got no idea what you could be talking about!! You are amazziinnnggggggggg.....
(See now THAT'S when to use that smilie ) hehe

Anyway, I liked this poem as well, different, interesting viewpoint.

Why is it that we are at our most ingenius only when trying to destroy the things that keep us alive and thriving?

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9 posted 2002-06-14 09:43 AM


jenn---->huh?

là où est mon amour?
donde está mi amour?
wo ist meine Liebe?
Nelly Furtado é a menina a mais bonita no mundo largo do todo.


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10 posted 2002-06-15 03:06 PM


Dopey, thanks for clearing that up.  THe whole Love IS touch and Touch IS love is based on the fact that so many people seem to think that there HAS TO be a physical component to a relationship in order for it to be love, and that's not always true.

Acire, nope, not about NITSUJ.  That chapter's closed.  He's been acting really weird lately, since I've been spending so much time with Cody.

Thanks everyone...

I've never seen you on the streets of this town, I've never seen you just hanging around, But you still tell me that you know me... ~Justin Sane

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11 posted 2002-06-17 09:41 AM


He must be jealous then

là où est mon amour?
donde está mi amour?
wo ist meine Liebe?
Nelly Furtado é a menina a mais bonita no mundo largo do todo.


Allysa
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12 posted 2002-06-17 02:52 PM


He keeps on commenting on how "lucky Cody is to have a girl like me" and how he wants to "shake his hand and say congratulations on getting the best girl" blah blah blah...

I've never seen you on the streets of this town, I've never seen you just hanging around, But you still tell me that you know me... ~Justin Sane

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13 posted 2002-06-18 04:36 PM


yup, he jealous now that he can't have ya

là où est mon amour?
donde está mi amour?
wo ist meine Liebe?
Nelly Furtado é a menina a mais bonita no mundo largo do todo.


Allysa
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14 posted 2002-06-19 05:01 PM


I think he just needs to shut up and get over it because I'm never going back to that. Ever.  He had his chance, he didn't take it, and honestly, I'm glad that he didn't because I deserve so much better than him and I've found so much better than him!

I've never seen you on the streets of this town, I've never seen you just hanging around, But you still tell me that you know me... ~Justin Sane

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15 posted 2002-06-19 07:42 PM


I'm glad you've realized that

là où est mon amour?
donde está mi amour?
wo ist meine Liebe?
Nelly Furtado é a menina a mais bonita no mundo largo do todo.


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16 posted 2002-06-19 08:47 PM


you're right: love isnt touch....cuz touch would be lust. i liked this one better then your other two- it works outside of the feild and explores your mind more then the other ones. you did well with this poem allysa.

could the darkness be my friend?

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17 posted 2002-06-27 03:28 PM


Justin called me this morning.
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