Teen Poetry #5 |
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blakloks Member
since 2002-06-01
Posts 60 |
this poem is about this person whom i once thought was a friend, but one day she seemed to hate me, just for no reason at all.i will never forget the look she gave me . looks can tell glint thou glints spark of lightning i am cut open up and away why me once you knew me i still know you shrug moment passed snakes wind in different directions dusty bound deep in me i still remember that flash okay, i know this is sucky, but its my first try allright? |
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since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Welcome to Passions!!! First of all i think you did a really good job on your first post. a persons eyes can tell so many things. You did a great job and im looking forward to reading more from you. p.s.-please check ur e-mail for a special greeting! Sometimes I get so weird |
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Sucky? Not at all. I like the fact that you believe [as do so many writers here] that in getting it out, you also leave a message... there was a lot of metaphor in this. I think I'm going to like seeing you grow.... Welcome to Passions! Karilea |
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blakloks Member
since 2002-06-01
Posts 60 |
ohh, thanx so much! this is my first time showing pple my poems so i was kinda scared. thanx so much |
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
NO! NO! NO! ALL WRONG! Sucky? Hardly so! Very well done....I liked the style. Very new, very POW! In your face kind of writing. I enjoyed this very much friend! MORE! ![]() I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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blakloks Member
since 2002-06-01
Posts 60 |
thanx pple...u haf no idea what these mean to me...they make me feel so good...thanx so much |
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