Teen Poetry #5 |
An Interval's Time |
fulanodetal3684 Junior Member
since 2001-10-10
Posts 19 |
I died promptly, (now) was told yet over the span of a month (now) lingered along the thought that maybe my idea was to be among the intentions of a lesser god (Now) meddles, (it) is to suppose from afar the interrogatory is being interposed by the ever-so-intermittent prose which persists to be of no form/flow thus instancing the history of all But if (now) was only to behold that what (it) seems to write of is in itself a product of myself, and myself being a product of a thought pretending to be an idea on its own, then... And what is it to be said about the introspective self, claimed by none, inciting the spirits to make themselves of them and to hold them, furthermore, to realize their potential out of the cold To believe is to belong, I know yet over the span of a moment I passed along the idea that maybe (now's) thought was to be among the intentions of almighty God |
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Winston Froom Junior Member
since 2001-11-28
Posts 32 |
Absolutely remarkable! Brilliant! I enjoyed this piece thoroughly. Comparable to Plato in philosophical statements/propositions. Definitley an example to follow.. Job well done! |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I liked this one a lot, very profound. But in it being so good I could also be a bit harder on you (since you seem to have a lot of talent) than most I thought the ending was a bit weak. That's all I could see. The whole poem has so much passion and the ending kind of resolutes without keeping true to the intensity of the poem. Well done though, VERY well done. If Winston liked it, then you must KNOW it is a masterpiece. post more pq me gusto. Quedo cabron. I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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