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inspiredpoetwriter
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0 posted 2002-05-30 10:19 PM





Hey! Every1 plz tell me what u honestly thought of this poem emailme back about it plz. ~Thanks~

Ask Your Self
5/30/2002


Sometime in the night you
Awake & ask your self
When is somebody going to
Stand at your side?

Some where in your mind
You ask your self your self to find somebody
Who might help you through
Your troubled times.

Something hurts inside your heart
You ask you self what it is all you
Feel is the emptiness
Inside.

Sometime in the morning
When the sun comes to rise
You ask your self how come
Time wont move slow?

Somewhere in the tears
You’ve cried you ask your
Self why do I have to be
So alone so sad?

Something crushes you down
To the pavement ripping apart your
Skin to bleed you ask your self
Why’d this happen to me?

Sometime in the breeze you
Hear the voices tell
You cruel things you ask
Your self what you did so wrong?

-Ang-



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Mon Cherie
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1 posted 2002-05-31 11:20 AM


Thank you for sharing this. I really feel for this.

Something hurts inside your heart
You ask you self what it is all you
Feel is the emptiness
Inside.

Somewhere in the tears
You’ve cried you ask your
Self why do I have to be
So alone so sad?

I guess we need to feel ourselves in love with other people to fill up this emptiness. Sometimes it is not a void that can be filled by companionship, you just need a special person. Yet, in life, we need to learn how to nurture ourselves in solitude. Being alone doesn't necessarily equate to being lonely. Sometimes we need to grow alone.

Sometime in the morning
When the sun comes to rise
You ask your self how come
Time wont move slow?

Yes, I always ask myself this question. When I am busy all day long, how I wish time would go slower at night... the few precious hours I have at night for me to catch up with my family, and to watch tv. The few precious hours that usually gets eaten up by the need to sleep which comes from the fatigue of working the whole day. *sigh* vicious cycle...

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2 posted 2002-06-10 11:51 PM


Well put...I liked the poem. Hope to see more!

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