Teen Poetry #5 |
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tzaddiqim Junior Member
since 2002-02-14
Posts 15 |
When I look at you laugh, I feel my heart lighten, A flutter of an emotion, Something strong inside me, Trying to break free of chains, Chains that I put in place, That you broke for me, at last. You set me free, we have so little time I have so much to offer, I have so much to give. I want to give it. |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
This poem was very intersting. Breaking free is amazing, its like no other feeling. because you know your free. well keep up the good work Regina |
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Who iis she Junior Member
since 2002-05-14
Posts 41Some where over the rainbow |
I dont know how i feel about this poem its kind of short and a tiny bit confussing so i dunno. Τ׺·. .·º ËriÇ康. .·º×¤Î |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
hi tzaddiqim, i am curious here: why would the couple have "too little time?" i liked the last line:short, concise and assertive |
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tzaddiqim Junior Member
since 2002-02-14
Posts 15 |
We have little time because in September I go to London and she goes to Edinburgh, currently we're in school. And it was supposed to be a little confusing, to reflect the feelings involved in the situation. |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
hi again I'm sorry to hear that..i hope that both of you can create some beautiful memories together so that if you go your separate ways, these memories will serve as a legacy to what once was... if you need to talk, i'm always here, listening... always, faterider [email protected] |
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